FIC: Omnia Vincit Odium - part III, HP, SS/SB, NC-17

[kleio_the_muse]

Right, this is it, the last part. A sort of an epilogue to finish the whole bloody thing off.

And I'm still in great debt to fluffyllama for the beta:)

Comments

[dwimmercrafty]

Oh wow. Wow. Wow. Sorry--a little speechless here.

I really thought they were going to destroy him.

[kleio_the_muse]

Oh, nothing as hideous as that! Although, some might think he got the fate worse than death. Don't think Sirius thought so, however;)

[gaeta]

Oh, wonderful! I had read "In Crutiatu Veritas" and loved it, so I was delighted to find your post tonight and then read this wonderful set of stories.

What you do with the portrait is just fabulous, and I adore that ending. You just know Severus is going to raise that boy up right!

Sirius's journal -- that's the one part I had some trouble with. A lot of it I liked very much -- details like him sneaking out, tracking mud on the floor and catching hell from Molly made me smile, and a lot of his musings work well. But I did feel that the voice was a bit young, that is, not different enough from 16-year-old Sirius, not quite the voice of a mature man (and in spite of his sometimes adolescent behavior, I do think Sirius has some maturity).

Still, this is a minor quibble. I enjoyed the story a great deal. Thank you.

[kleio_the_muse]

No, thank you for the comment!:)

I was actually wondering about that myself, about Sirius's voice, and then I read a discussion in arwencordelia's journal (I think?) about this change in Sirius's character between GoF and OotP. In the latter he does act more like a little teenager (all the sulking and such) than the man we met in the former. Obviously I leant towards the younger and sillier version, but it's true that I could have given the man in him a bit more room.

[gaeta]

I also read the discussion on arwencordelia's LJ, and I actually posted a sort of rebuttal in my own.

The fact that you're responding to that explains a lot of why Sirius in this set of stories sounds the way he does, particularly in contrast to "in crutiatu veritas," which I described to a friend as a Romantic Comedy Torture story. I still prefer his voice there, and I think it captured his flippancy and sense of being ill-used quite well.

[trobadora]

Hm - my reaction is very different from yours here. I didn't think he came off as too immature, and it seemed to work very well in the context of OotP, but that is mostly because to me, that journal was exactly the kind of thing he would have written down - flippant and sarcastic and self-deprecating and self-indulgent in turns. But just like in the prequel, it was the flippancy that seemed to cover so much more that was underneath. I never questioned his maturity, and I thought the differences between the two Sirii came out very well.

[trobadora]

This was so sad, but hopeful at the same time. And I can satisfy my craving for happy endings by imagining Portrait!Sirius and Snape snarking at each other happily ever after...

Besides, what better ending could there possibly be for a fic than his cock (...) sliding into Sirius's mouth?!

Will try to be more coherent later.

[kleio_the_muse]

Thanks! I thought that if the second part ended in wanking, then this should end with sucking;)

[ex_delete790]

"He needs you more than I do."

Oh, how utterly beautiful.

I love how you wrote Sirius-16, very believable as to how a young Sirius might have been. I felt sorry when for him when Remus said he wasn't the one Sirius would have wanted Harry to know. And poor Severus, losing Sirius after all those wasted years and so little time together, left with nothing but memories, journal entries and now, Sirius-16. (I agree with the other poster -- I initially thought they were going to destroy Sirius-16 ! Much better this way.)

A great story, and a wonderful addition to the Snack community, small as it is.

[kleio_the_muse]

Thank you very much:)

[slytheriny]

OMg omg omg !!! Yay! You finished it (and I finally read it) Wow! I loved the ending and I too thought Remus was going to destroy the painting... What an original fic! I loved it! *becomes greedy* want more and more and more and more and mooooreeeee moooreeee lol :p

[kleio_the_muse]

Thanks, love:) This story hasn't really got much attention, so it means a lot to hear that.

Btw, this was the first sequel I've ever written and will probably be the last as well - I'm now convinced that every story should end only once;)

[slytheriny]

Awww *whimper* but me want more *pouts* lol no joking apart, you really should write more be it another fic or sequel. *hopeful look* ^_^