NEWS FLASH!!! Jennifer Nickerson Weds Severus Snape!!!

[klawzie]

This just in -

Newsflash: Jennifer Nickerson Weds Severus Snape
Wife refuses access to her husband henceforth

Comments

::DIES!!!!::

[sagesk]

HA HA HA!!!! XD XD The only thing I can say is that you set your point across very well.

::hugj00::

[andreya]

YAY!! This is great!! Well said!!

OK, if you want constructive criticism;) :
I wouldn't put in the part in brackets explaining about the Fanfic.Net, especially the last part >>(... Nickerson reminds us that her works are of course, fact, but felt she’d gain a better readership using the services of FanFiction.Net.)
Instead, I'd just slightly rewrite the next paragraph and add in that she decided to inform the community of the 'fact' by posting there;) to burst their bubbles ;D

"...Angela Addams rolls her eyes" would be more snappy, I think;)
If she's a Fan Club Vice-President, I don't think she'd be that sane as to point out he's fictional. Instead, I'd expect her to have a crush on him herself. Maybe you could omit or rewrite that sentence, or add in a bit of the hint (at least that maybe the other girls are accusing her of wanting him for herself;)

I love the last sentence, and many other in this hilariously refreshing paper!!

[beatprogeny]

That's just wicked awesome. Muchos kudos.

[polenth]

That was fun. I particularly liked the unattractive description followed by 'He's so handsome!'. A lot of these fan idols wouldn't be so great if you really thought about it.

Snape's age came across as odd, especially as you gave the girl an exact age. Though noone really knows his exact age, it adds more of that air of realism to have it pinned down to a year.

On a non-content based note, it was incredibly tiny on my monitor, and really hurt the eyes to read. Especially considering it's length, maybe having it in default font size might make it a little easier to read/review?

[klawzie]

*blush* Wow. (Thanks for letting me know! :) )