Finally Found Chapter III

[maigretecho]

Finally Found Chapter III
Title: The Throbbing Encounter
Author: maigretecho
Pairing: Wolfram/ Yuuri
Characters: Almost everyone in KKM.
Genre: action, “shivering”, “too-little-romance-yet”, revelation
Summary: Short-tempered widower named Yuri Shibuya was recklessly driving a car with his best buddy, Ken Murata. The result of his action both had an

Comments

[aria_dc_al_fine]

The plot's a bit...fast. The pace. There are a lot of details you should address, but did not, either because you want readers to yearn for more...or you neglect those details. Like...Wendy. What of her? Is Yuuri still living with his parents and Shouri? How was he taking care of Wendy? A lot of frustration, angst and father-child interactions can be exploited there. How old is Greta? How did she adapt to life on earth? What is she doing now? Is she married? How could reincarnated Wolfram be a teenager in 7 years? Is there any significance to the amount of years that had passed? When writing a fanfiction, I believe it's best to work out the necessary details. Just because a fanfiction is fan's work, and one isn't paid for writing fanfictions, doesn't mean one shall hurry things up. Wonderful things take time to grow :)