Meh...But More Story

[kittengnome]

            Her arms were full of the bolts of fabric that she was returning to the shelves after a flurry of young women had descended on the store when she heard the jingle of someone entering the store.

“I’ll be with you in just a moment.”  Her back to the door, she attempted to shift the bolts so the slick satins would stop trying

Comments

[belial_84]

Most of the four pages before this scene is an explanation of the relationship that's introduced in MoO, and I'm not so sure that I want to give that much away.
You know, sometimes the same thing happens to me, but I think that's because I want to have the relationship clear in my head and I tend not to include the explanation in the final version of my fics.

I really liked this fic; it's sweet and cute (uhm, can I say so about something written...?! O_o) and it made smile. Consider that I don't smile often and that I'm not very prone to like sweet fics too much - so I guess you did a good job and that I got a gift XP

Sorry for any mistakes; Enlgish is not my first language and I'm pretty tired 'cause of university -.- XD

[kittengnome]

Hehe...thank you!

Yeah, it's nice to lay things out for myself so at least *I* have a good idea of what's going on in a story...though I have to be careful and make sure that I'm making everything clear and letting the reader know everything they need to for things to make sense (As the author, I know it, so it's easy to forget that I haven't revealed a certain detail in the actual story yet). I've already realized I did that a little in this bit (referring to things that are mentioned/explained/occur in that other four pages--like why a female seamstress was making a uniform, since tailoring/making men's clothing tended to be the job of a male tailor in the 18th century...*goes and hides under my history nerd rock*), but I don't think it's *too* confusing so far! I hope...