Did I Mention part 1: Things You Don't Do

[kitfallen]

Title: Things You Don’t Do
Genre: The World Ends With You
Rating: PG
Pairings: Eri/Shiki, Joshua/Neku
Summary: There were a lot of things that Eri had to learn not to do when she became friends with all of them.

Comments

[undeadandroid]

Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh Kit this is AWESOME! <3 I adore your characterization. Your Eri is fantastic. also shiki/eri is my twewy otp

[kitfallen]

:D
What, not Josh/Neku? lol I like both, especially when they're written together, but no one writes enough Eri/Shiki. D:

[undeadandroid]

Hehehe I like Josh/Neku, too, but EVERYONE ships Josh/Neku. There is not nearly enough Eri/Shiki. It's practically canon!

[kitfallen]

True, true. I have a weakness for practically cannon pairings, you know this.

[kitfallen]

YAY! X3

[okapian]

That was very nice. Making it Eri's point of view was a great creative choice. I really liked the first part with all the references to the Game, and the parts where the gang got really tense and nervous around Joshua.

Just a side point, but what's "girl-haired"?

[kitfallen]

Oops. Fixing that now >_>; "pink-haired" is what it's supposed to be...

Thanks, I rather liked the idea of an "outsider's" point of view of the group, especially because it's obvious Shiki wouldn't just break off with Eri for Neku, Rhyme, and Beat. Of course they'd all be introduced, yet not all that many people actually have Eri in their stories, at all. So Eri is definitely there, it's just a question of whether not Shiki tells her about what happened.

Originally I didn't want to have Shiki, Beat, or Rhyme remember anything from the last day, and Neku, being how he can be, hadn't told them. But even if they don't remember, I can see Neku accidentally saying something and then spilling it all. So, either way, they all have reason to be cautious around Josh--although Rhyme trusts him the same way Neku does, so she is also accepting where the others aren't.

[zilleniose]

My god, that was brilliant. I've always felt that the majority of fics centered around shortly after the game lacked something - lacked realism. The fact that you zoned in on the fact that everyone would certainly have scars from the Game is already far more than I've seen from other fics. It's cute and all to see everyone happy with a sugar-sweet ending where everyone just accepts what happened in the Game, but I hardly think that's how it would work in the real world.

The fact that everyone's afraid of Joshua is another point I've rarely seen, and think is something very much key in showing realistic reactions about the Game as a whole. Of course Neku trusts him and even invited him into the group, but I still could never see everyone accepting him right away, after all he's done. Of course, I would love to see more chapters of this, perhaps with a small emphasis on how everyone gradually begins to accept the Composer as their friend

[kitfallen]

I absolutely love writing realism into worlds that everyone assumes are 'happy-go-lucky' with flowers and puppys and all that. I think that the very fact they went through so much trauma would be a reason for the Reapers to erase their memories of the Game after coming back to life--but I have my reasons why that didn't happen. I really enjoy writing the aftereffects of psychological trauma, actually (as twisted as that sounds) and no matter what other fics say, I definitely don't think everyone would have been 'just fine' after what happened to them.

Hell, if all of that had happened to me, I would be terrified of Joshua. The only way I could see them accepting Josh is if they forgot the last day and Neku never told them. I'm already writing a parallel of this story in Josh's point of view, because I wanted to show things that might have otherwise been missed. If the plot evolves anymore, I might just go ahead and write each chapter in a different character's mindsets

[pmiller1]

As I said on Fan Fiction Net

"Good Work.

And You're Right, Someone should writes more about Eri."

Really, I don't know why they isn't a lot of Eri and Shiki myself.
I was hoping they would get the idea, that Eri try to be a Good friend to Shiki and they would feel sorry for her, I feel that Joshua and Neku are a Bit-over-used and I'm not a fan of Yaoi Myself

And Yeah I would like them to think that Joshua haven't erase their memories of the Games, but sadly they have scars about him is one thing.

And Keep up the Good work.

[kitfallen]

Eri is a rather interesting character, if only for the view that she gets of the group post-Game. I wish people would write more about her.

I just enjoy pairings that make sense, especially when they're practically cannon, like Eri/Shiki and Josh/Neku.

Those sort of events are bound to leave scars, sadly enough.

Thankies :3

[pmiller1]

Yeah, No Love to the Cute Girl with a Hot Body

Well, I can see that Joshua trying to be friendly to Neku and Neku would feel Okay to have him around, But I don't know if Josh/Neku cannon or not, It even like Joshua is just Playing with him or Fangirls are just doing this for the Fetish. And Sorry, If see to be Anti-Yaoi to you.

And Eri would be glad to have Shiki back and all and I like see Eri/Shiki alot. But My OTP is Neku/Shiki, you know what I'm saying?

You're welcome. :3

[kitfallen]

Eri is quite hot--it amuses me that Shiki irl is so conservative in dress while ingame she wore the revealing clothes that Eri wore