Fullmetal Alchemist; Paninya x Winry: "Hearts and Roses"

[kirschvanille]

Whee, first shoujo-ai style fic in FMA. Go me! =D This is another one of those fics that wouldn't let me sleep. The original idea started out with Paninya giving Winry a scalp massage to help her sleep, but alas, I ended up not writing that part at all.

Title: Hearts and Roses
Author: Kitana
Warnings: G, I think. Paninya/Winry, slight shoujo-ai.

Comments

[forgottenlover]

::smiles:: how cute ::beams::

[kitanabychoice]

^^ Thank ye.

[animethief92]

That's so sweet! You should write more Paninya/Winry fluff!

[kitanabychoice]

Yee, thank you! ^_^

[baeckahaesten]

.........DED FROM CUTE. Sorry, sorry, stupid review-day, but it was so nicely compressed and sweet and, whee, Winry-love is so so nice, especially when done WELL and realistically like here. You're too cool to be a n00b. Write, like, more. Lots more~! My only nitpick is that in places it's a little clunky, like 'the dark haired girl then reached a hand out to Winry'. Just flow-stuff. Minor minor minor. But it made me all warm and fuzzy and yeah LOVE to you.

[kitanabychoice]

^_^ Thank you for such a great review! I am full of yay now! =D

Ahh! It seems clunky?! Hm. *re-reads* Yeah, you're right. o_O I'll think about changing that to sound better then. ^_^ Thank you.

[baeckahaesten]

Only in a few places a little tiny bit and it's kind of a punctuation thing. I really hate leaving reviews that sound like "it's good, except not" and that's really not what I meant. Yeah ^^ It's like, the least important thing in the world. Seriously. Don't, um, get hangups or anything. Because it's IC and nicely understated with emotion, which is what matters. And I'm glad you're with the happy!!