fic: supernatural // these crimes of illusion, chapter 2.2 [R]

[kiraboshi]

Can we just start this day over, please? New Girl's getting on my nerves a little -- treating me like I'm stupid or lazy or something like that *growls* and it's getting to me. Let's start over, please?

Killer migraine attacked, thus this chapter's a bit later than you're used to. Sorry!

Cheer me up. Please, please? Cause I so need it today.

Comments

[trishabooms]

“Because you carry fae blood. How else would your son have inherited such a gift?”

A-ha!

Another excellent chapter, thank you.

I am sorry about the migraine, however the story is so good it's well worth waiting for!

[kiraboshi]

Mwahahaha! Take THAT John!

Aww. Thanks. I hate making you guys wait. You're all so nice to me and my little fic here, I don't want to make you wait too long!

[mellaithwen]

SWEET knew it, HA JOHN, try and be in denial about THAT

is it wrong that I'm totally beaming right now?

I mean come on: Angels, I am seriously so in love with this it hurts

[kiraboshi]

Oh, c'mon, you don't think he'll try?

*blushes* I'm so glad you love this story; it's not for everyone, I know, so it makes me happy when someone DOES enjoy it.

[mellaithwen]

...okay good point

Ah seriously, first you have faeries and honestly, even if there were no winchesters I'd read...probably, then you have the creepy as hell descriptions and serious depth, and dude ANGELS, seriously, if you could implode from squee, I would have by now :')

[rosekay]

I am enjoying this whole cycle so much and spent this entire chapter anxiously eyeing the scroll bar and wishing there weren't so little space left at the bottom. Your pacing and sense of atmosphere is amazing; you sustained this high note of suspense throughout the entire chapter, and now I feel like I've just fallen out of a vice.

We've been set up to expect the revelation, but I can't wait to see John's response to that. Is the Queen omniscient? Is it definitely John and not Mary?

Loved the way the chess game played out and all these little details about Dean that leave John feeling unmanned because he didn't know. The mention of Sammy makes me embarassingly excited to eventually see him enter this verse.

In conclusion, YAY!

[kiraboshi]

Thanks so much. Pacing is definatly something I pay attention to -- as a writer, you don't want things to move too slowly or too quickly -- it's a hard balance to get just right. It's nice to hear I've got it!

Queen omniscient? Is it definitely John and not Mary?

Yes, she is. But there's more to that story that I'm actually working on now.

The mention of Sammy makes me embarassingly excited to eventually see him enter this verse.

I was trying to decide if I would write that story, and so many people want to see Sam enter this verse, I think I'm going to dive right into it when I finish this fic.

And Dean playing chess was totally a self-indulgence. ;)

[anonymous]

Love that this all comes back to John. Poor Dean thinking he will never get his sight back. Will John accept some blame. Ha-ha.

Looking forward to more.

[eloise_bright]

There are many things to love about this, but the one that struck me most on first reading was the pacing. You weave the story so deftly, seamlessly, I feel as if I'm there in the fae realm, with the shifting trees and the glamour.

I loved why Dean was good at chess - and feel bad for ever doubting him. *g* And I really like the interaction between Dean and John here - Dean's still angry at his father for doubting him, but he's not quite willing to push it the way Sam would.

John takes a seat next to him, putting Dean just slight of his left shoulder, a protective move Dean would normally complain about but now just appreciates it silently.

So much unspoken here, but we get John's careful protection of Dean, and Dean's quiet acceptance. *wibbles*

And then you hit us with the kicker.

“Because you carry fae blood. How else would your son have inherited such a gift?” I have to admit there was some fist punching the air going on here. Am I bad for hoping that Dean sticks out his tongue at John and goes "Nah nah nah nah nah - told

[kiraboshi]

I loved why Dean was good at chess - and feel bad for ever doubting him. *g* And I really like the interaction between Dean and John here - Dean's still angry at his father for doubting him, but he's not quite willing to push it the way Sam would.

Heeee. I had to do that because I think someone who spends their time hunting and thinking of stratigy would be good at a game like chess. As for that interaction, that's all due to my beta, who had me re-work the opening before posting.

John certainly can't say Dean's lying now, can he? *g*