Hey, nice to see some people are still posting here, I kinda don't want this comm to die yet.
Anyway...dear God, this fic is awful. Mainly for the 'what-in-the-WORLD-makes-you-think-this-plot-would-work' factor, but Mpreg has always freaked me out quite a bit. Great job on the spork though, I really like your style and the team you have going, they all seem so IC. Your Zexion's ignorance of sporking is so funny! This part had me laughing so hard:
Demyx: A butt baby for you is practically a butt baby for me, because well… you know… Zexion: *flinches and inches away from Demyx* Oh, God. I feel… so ignorant. Axel: Roxas and I make butt babies all the time in these things. Roxas: *Grits teeth* This fic isn’t even about us.
Roxas: Wait. So, this girl drew her blood and squirted it into a formula, which can magically make guys pregnant. Then she poured it into an open soda can, and Axel gets shit for slapping on a convincing enough Pepsi label. Not only did she do that, but you, Zexion, drank bloody pregnancy liquid out of an opened can which Axel, no offence, who has very little art skills, had slapped a label, which is probably made out of masking tape, on. Axel: Roxas, quit looking at this logically, and enjoy Zexion’s humiliation while you can.
Demyx: He made it look very manly. Like when they were doing the c-section, he was all serious and there was a ton of drama like he was in grave danger, and-
That description made me laugh.
Zexion: *flinches and inches away from Demyx* Oh, God. I feel… so ignorant.
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The new site is called Heartless Fics and can be found at this link.
http://community.livejournal.com/heartless_fics/
Aaaand, according to the new rules, Axel should ALWAYS be green, even in an untraditional team.
Other than that, nice job. You might want to move over to the new comm though, so that you'll get readers.
Dunno why I was checking this old thing :/
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Anyway...dear God, this fic is awful. Mainly for the 'what-in-the-WORLD-makes-you-think-this-plot-would-work' factor, but Mpreg has always freaked me out quite a bit. Great job on the spork though, I really like your style and the team you have going, they all seem so IC. Your Zexion's ignorance of sporking is so funny! This part had me laughing so hard:
Demyx: A butt baby for you is practically a butt baby for me, because well… you know…
Zexion: *flinches and inches away from Demyx* Oh, God. I feel… so ignorant.
Axel: Roxas and I make butt babies all the time in these things.
Roxas: *Grits teeth* This fic isn’t even about us.
Thanks for brightening my day! On to part 2! :)
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Axel: Roxas, quit looking at this logically, and enjoy Zexion’s humiliation while you can.
Roxas: At least this baby’s not a butt baby.
I almost died laughing. here. Wonderful sporking!
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That description made me laugh.
Zexion: *flinches and inches away from Demyx* Oh, God. I feel… so ignorant.
D: Poor Zexion.
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