my favourite place was me and you: chapter 2

[kikis2]

Title: my favourite place was me and you
Author: Kiki
Fandom: Glee
Pairing/Character(s): Puck/Rachel/Santana, Rache/OMC undertones
Rating: M
Word count: 2483
Spoilers: None, futurefic
Summary: Rachel is forced to leave the spotlight and return home to face the people she sold for her dream.
Disclaimer. None of this is mine.

Comments

[meagan4dominic]

I like how this chapter featured more Santana. You captured her perfectly, I love all the italics you used when she was speaking, I could hear her clearly in my mind, emphasizing those certain words it was perfect

The way you portray Rachel is amazing,
Instead, she closes her eyes and pretends it's all one big stage production.
(There's nothing visible on the darkened stage. The dramatic thump of her cane of the floor will echo through the audience. The light deepens and the bitter, wizened crow ambles around her shambling cottage, waiting for someone to break the spell.) - absolutely perfect!!!

I really love the flashbacks, especially the last one, ooh the plot thickens.

Also, I like that you gave Finn his football scholarship and sent him to a college outside of Ohio, so he could escape, very sweet

[kikis2]

Finn is just too sweet as the good guy <3 Glee's tricky 'cause I'm pretty sure I can't relate to a single character, so I'm psyched that you liked the characterizations. ^^