Loved it! I adore the subtle way you managed to convey atobe’s emotions without actually writing them out! Poor atobe, it really tugged at the heart strings <3
I'm really really glad that's the part you liked, since conveying emotions is the entire point of this particular prompt table (for me, anyway)! Thank you!
Most befitting of ore-sama! I love how well yuo capturd his bocchama attitude and how he's still kind of chafing under having to act much older than his age.
The final image of him beaming is an adroable insight into his true self <3 well done.
Hi, just lurking around. This is the first time I've read:
a. a 12 year old Atobe b. a normal somewhat haughty Atobe
While he is snooty, you managed to show that he is still a child looking for attention and also trying to control himself to be as dignified as possible because he was raised to do so.
Or maybe I hardly read Prince of Tennis fanfiction these days that's why I said that. This is nicely done as it gives the reader a glimpse on how affluent but lonely his childhood was. Yet even if he was forced to act maturely, he was still a child in the end.
It's also nice to see that there is some interaction with his mother and Atobe so at least his family life is not too empty.
As for the icon, a friend of mine gave it to me. :)
I haven't read PoT fanfic in a while either, but it was popular back when I did a few years ago. And that's exactly the, well, not quite emotion but the state of being (there has got to be a better way to say it) that I was trying to portray, so yay! Thank you!
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I'm really really glad that's the part you liked, since conveying emotions is the entire point of this particular prompt table (for me, anyway)! Thank you!
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The final image of him beaming is an adroable insight into his true self <3 well done.
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a. a 12 year old Atobe
b. a normal somewhat haughty Atobe
While he is snooty, you managed to show that he is still a child looking for attention and also trying to control himself to be as dignified as possible because he was raised to do so.
I like this one.
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re: a. Really? I thought a first year stories were incredibly popular, for writers at least.
I'm glad I caught him at a realistic moment and I'm even happier that you liked it. Thank you!
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It's also nice to see that there is some interaction with his mother and Atobe so at least his family life is not too empty.
As for the icon, a friend of mine gave it to me. :)
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It's adorable. Your friend is really talented.
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Nice fic.
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Thank you! ♥ Thank you for commenting!
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