Brigit's Flame Week 4 May

[keppiehed]

Title: Crossroad
Author: Keppiehed
Rating: G
Warnings: none
Word Count: 3244 (apologies!)
Prompts: “pound of flesh”, the first sentence has to be the same as the last sentence from week#1 (WHOA, people!), and “the problem of evil”
A/N: Written for week #4 at brigits_flame advanced level. I think all the prompts are evident, but feel free to ask for an explanation if

Comments

[rubyelf]

Woooo! This is excellent. All the prompts and such a great story... pulls you right along from the very beginning. I love it.

[keppiehed]

Thanks, Ruby! I felt like this story was just not coming together, that it was long and draggy, so I appreciate your quick read and feedback. I haven't told something in a straight linear way in awhile, so I thought I'd lost the hang of it. I was damning myself for that run-on of a first sentence I gave myself to work with, too. But you set my mind a ease with your kind words, as you always do!

And I LOVE your icon! Jareth always makes me swoon!

[rubyelf]

Long maybe, but I don't think it drags at all. I think it moves at quite a good pace. And some unexpected twists, too, which is always good.

And yes, Jareth... had such a little-girl crush on him... fascinated by the tight pants, although at the time I'm not sure I knew why. Suppose that gave my mind a shove in the direction of the gutter at a young age...

[keppiehed]

I couldn't agree more. Here I was watching a nice puppet movie and before I knew it I was like "What's your problem, Sarah? STAY WITH HIM!!!" Ah, so impressionable. I still don't see why she had a problem with the whole deal. *sighs dreamily*

[keppiehed]

Wow. What a compliment! I am not quite sure that I am worthy of such high praise, but it has left me with a glow to hear it. Genius author, eh? *struts* Why, thank you, my dear. I do believe that you have made my night!

[keppiehed]

Ooh, I'd be delighted! But only if I may friend you back.

[hbart]

This is fabulous, but oh so sad. Brannagh (which is a great name, by the way) has no real choice here. Whatever she decides has a negative outcome. She didn't intend to kill the bird, you'd think she could suffer a lesser punishment. I guess the bird might feel differently, LOL.

How difficult to start and end with the same line, but so nicely done on your part. You've come back from the obscure a bit, back to where I like you most. Great story!

[keppiehed]

I know, I had drifted into the outer rim there last month, LOL! This one felt like it had some bumps in it that needed re-writing. But actually Nellie helped me construct some of the plot because you know that is my weak point! I'm all about "la la la, let's write about feelings and how the wind in the trees reflects mortal despair" and she is all type-A outline person like "That's fine, but what kind of bird, specifically, are you going to use? What scene is she going to find out about the wedding?". She was a harsh taskmistress to work with and I was a little scared of her! So lesson learned: work with your kid if you want a halfway decent linear story and all your nails bitten off from the stress of it! (Actually, I can see you in a similar situation, so don't laugh too hard).

[hbart]

You girls are a good team! I would never invite this situation into being with Kaitlyn. But I might want to borrow Nellie for a bit ...