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Brigit's Flame Entry- Week 3 February

Feb 15, 2011 15:52

Title: Down to the Filter
Author: Keppiehed
Rating: R
Warnings: language, character death
Word Count: 1718
Prompt: “snapshot”
A/N: Written for week #3 at Brigits_flame.

( Snapshot )

entry: brigits flame february, language, character death, prompt: snapshot

Comments 24

eyedsofmarch February 16 2011, 01:55:14 UTC

You know, that's not anywhere near a typical image of a psychic, but when you really think about it, when you really think what that kind of thing can do to someone's life and how it must make them feel - seeing death all the time - Beau comes out so vividly real.

Your characterization is amazing. I was sucked right in, I want to read more stories about Beau and get to know him better, though I feel like I already know everything I need to know about him.

You write so beautifully and the take on the prompt is perfect! Well done.

keppiehed February 16 2011, 01:58:39 UTC

Oh, thanks very much! That is just exactly what I was aiming for: everything you said! So I got it right!

However, I have a feeling that I am going to be tipping my hat to you this week in the polls. Not only was that the perfect embodiment of the prompt, but you had the emotional punch to go with it. If you don't win, it won't be from my lack of vote, that's for certain!

eyedsofmarch February 16 2011, 02:23:06 UTC

Oh, I don't know about that.

I think your take on the prompt is better and there is no lack of emotion here either, it's just not the same one. You went at something from a very original angle and your character is so well drawn he might as well be walking around in my living room right now, chainsmoking.

I'll be cheerleading you this week.

leticiae February 16 2011, 05:39:23 UTC

Don't get me wrong, this was very good, but I couldn't help wonder at the end of the story if Greg was some sort of supernatural, pimp wannabe. ... I guess that's just the slanted sideness in my thinking.

I've had a few encounters with ghosts.... it's ok if you know the person, but if you don't, they can be a bother. ... dead people are not nearly as bad as actual demons and other more powerful spirits.... but that's just what I've seen.... and now, I'm just babbling.

Great use of the prompt-- snapshot. :)

keppiehed February 16 2011, 15:01:27 UTC

I would love to hear more about your ghostly encounters. How very interesting! It is a truly fascinating subject. I am not ashamed to admit that I would love to be in your shoes, but I don't have the constitution for it; I'm sure I'd never sleep again. I hope you tell me some stories. I would love to hear more from the real expert!

hereticalvision February 16 2011, 12:29:58 UTC

Ooh, interesting concept. I kind of like the reluctant-detective aspect of the psychic here. Seems kind of like Matt Damon's character in Hereafter? Interesting take.

keppiehed February 16 2011, 14:56:31 UTC

Oh, Hereafter is on my list, but I haven't seen it yet. I hope it is good.

Thanks for stopping by to read my original work! Hey, you're at the Flame sometimes, right? I hope we see you back there. It's always good to see a fellow fanficcer brougt over to o-fic!

hereticalvision February 16 2011, 15:17:50 UTC

I dunno, when I tried it I wasn't overly taken with the prompts. Maybe it was just a bad batch? But I would like to write more O-Fic, just need to finish my fest fics and find the time!

keppiehed February 16 2011, 15:38:31 UTC

Oh, I hear you. This isn't the best batch of prompts I have seen. And OMG, I am always swearing that's the last fest ... and yet I'm in another Snarry. HAHAHA. Isn't that the way it goes? I think RL needs to step off so I can write. Damn RL for always getting in my way all the time!

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w_x_2 February 16 2011, 14:51:57 UTC

I love how you ended it.

Th first time you sent it to me it wasn't complete and therefore I could only guess at what he was actually doing.

I am so proud of you, this is spectacular ^^

keppiehed February 16 2011, 14:58:27 UTC

Aw! *hugs* You are my best cheerleader! I didn't want to make you read it through again a second time; it was bad enough for you to have to deal with all of my angsty insecurity the first time. I don't think it's spectacular! You are always so nice. Thank you so much for being so good to me! *twirls you*

w_x_2 February 16 2011, 16:39:04 UTC

Thank you ^^ But I did tell you I wanted to see how it finished :)

Well, you're opinion doesn't matter when it comes to your writing and you're flushed and flustered :P

You're welcome ^^ *claps*

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keppiehed February 17 2011, 15:16:50 UTC

I have not read Red Dwarf , though I know it is very famous. I'm glad you thought it was different! It was a fun one to write, even though I think I might have rushed the end a bit. My pacing always leaves something to be desired. Thanks for always supporting me and taking the time to read!