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Brigit's Flame Entry- Week 2 February

Feb 10, 2011 10:42

Title: Atonement
Author: Keppiehed
Rating: G
Warnings: none
Word Count: 311
Prompt: “Random Acts”
A/N: Written for week #2 of Brigits_flame.

( Random Acts )

entry: brigits flame february, prompt: random acts, drabble

Comments 17

w_x_2 February 11 2011, 09:57:34 UTC

This was absolutely beautifuly done.

When you first mentioned it I never thought that you would write something which would remind me of someone.

But I shouldn't be surprised, you never cease to amaze me.

Well done, Keppie ^^

keppiehed February 11 2011, 12:44:52 UTC

This was the one I hated! I was all like "Wah! It isn't writing the way I wanted it to!" So in the end I just gave up and posted it anyway. I feel like I completely copped out this week and turned in something really sub-par. I liked last week's entry and it didn't do well, so I am blah, I think. I have a feeling I will get a holiday, because I will surely get voted off for this one!

*squishes you* You are always so nice--TOO nice to me! Don't be afraid to tell me that my stuff needs work, or to break out that wooden spoon! *winks*

w_x_2 February 12 2011, 15:42:47 UTC

Why did you hate it??

It's perfect!

I'm not afraid to tell you, in fact, I do tell you if I think you need to give something a second thought. And I'm not too nice, I'm just the right amount ^^

But this one definately doesn't need it ^^ I really love it *smiles*

rubyelf February 11 2011, 11:30:52 UTC

This is great... my first thought when reading it is that this is the dark side of helping. Working with children with chronic mental health problems is a job with many rewards but also a lot of dead ends and helplessness, and if you're in a field like that long enough, you see that so many of the people drawn to help are wounded themselves, unconsciously seeking some kind of redemption. Unfortunately those ones don't tend to last very long... offering healing when you're walking wounded can end up being a dangerous proposition.

keppiehed February 11 2011, 12:50:02 UTC

I was really worried that this was a weak offering this week!So to hear you say you like it is good to hear.

I couldn't agree more with all of your assessments of the "walking wounded", as you say. I think you're absolutely right: sometimes those who can't bear to face their own personal tragedies are still drawn to help, but the natural depression of the situation can lead to a burn-out. Very insightful comment, and one I am sure you have, unfortunately, gained from the experience of seeing played out in real life.

Thank you for reading, and for giving me a shot of confidence about this. I was sure it was terrible!

eyedsofmarch February 11 2011, 20:28:35 UTC

I knew someone like that - not a she, a he. I couldn't have gotten over the roughest spot in my life without him. I could never have him, he wasn't mine to have - he was dishonest and he "cheated" with so many others just like me. But I know deep down in my soul I couldn't have made it without him, so I forgave him for what he was.

And, I knew what he was - he was - your character.

Heh. I don't even know what else to say. I just get it, I get it so thoroughly that I have no other words. It is at once sad that there are people like that and that there needs to be people like that in this world, and good that they exist.

eyedsofmarch February 11 2011, 20:29:08 UTC

Funny enough, I still carry him with me - my icon - his nickname had something to do with butterflies.

keppiehed February 11 2011, 20:38:13 UTC

I am pleased, then, to know that I hit upon a reality so true. I was going to go in a completely different direction, and then I had a flash of insight that this was, instead, the way to go. But then I am never sure if I am treading the line between disaster and the right thing to have written. Your review assures me that maybe I chose the right way, after all.

I have long admired your icon. To know it has meaning makes it even more interesting. I am sorry that your friend caused you pain, but I am glad that he did you such a service that you can thank him for his help in the same breath. He must have been quite something. It is his loss not to have seen you take flight after the help he gave you. Because I think you have far to fly, and he's missing the best part!

eyedsofmarch February 11 2011, 20:55:12 UTC

What he gave to me outweighed the pain tenfold - it just took me awhile to realize it. At the time it hurt, but now, I have nothing but gratitude. It was a long time ago, my life is good now, the problems from then are resolved ( ... )

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katden February 16 2011, 16:10:12 UTC

Every line of this is woven with lovely word choices.

keppiehed February 16 2011, 16:12:12 UTC

Aw, thank you, Kat! You are very kind to say so! *blushes*

hbart February 21 2011, 04:32:50 UTC

I am so behind the times, but I am here now. I liked this, but don't know what to say about it. It occurs to me now that I am the worst reviewer of all time. I always know what I want to say, but it never comes out right and in the end I feel like I've used a lot of negative words to describe my thoughts about someone's story. Anyhow, I felt like this had a strong message and finished it feeling wowed, but then in retrospect, I'm not even sure who this person is and what she is doing and why her life is a wreck. Maybe it doesn't matter. This was vague but somehow still quite meaningful. I am interested to know if this is based at all on you or someone you know, or if it was a total whim of a piece. Anyway, I liked it.

keppiehed February 21 2011, 14:27:09 UTC

You always worry that you haven't said anything, or that what you've said was negative, but again, you said just the right things. I was going for all of that: vague and meaningful. I thought that to explain any more backstory would overburden the idea that she was trying to help, but was really in no position to be able to do so ( ... )