Comments | keerawa: dS snippet: Bad for the Soul

keerawa

dS snippet: Bad for the Soul

Feb 15, 2009 18:38

Fandom; Character: due South; Ray K
Rating: PG
Word Count: 300
Summary: Ever wonder why the officers of the 2-7 suddenly decided to move on Warfield?
Challenge: Written for the ds_snippets Challenge #100, prompt: spin, stalk
Warning: Rather dark
Author's Notes: Thanks to my beta, nos4a2no9. I have never worked so hard on a snippet. Five complete rewrites? Sheesh.

( Bad for the Soul )

snippet, due south, fic

Comments 25

spuffyduds February 16 2009, 04:39:23 UTC

Oh, Ray. Such a smart way to go at it, while his heart is breaking that the other way didn't work for Fraser, even with Ray himself. Ouchy.

keerawa February 17 2009, 09:07:04 UTC

Thanks, Spuffyduds. He's not proud of what's going on, that's for sure.

springwoof February 16 2009, 04:44:27 UTC

wow. perfect. but painful, like a punch in the gut.
great Ray voice.

keerawa February 17 2009, 09:07:16 UTC

Thanks, springwoof!

mackiedockie February 16 2009, 05:18:44 UTC

You realize, every time you write one of these things, it makes me come closer to the dark side of Due South.

keerawa February 17 2009, 09:07:58 UTC

Red rover, red rover, send mackiedockie right over! Ummm ... we have cookies? And pretty Candians?

akamine_chan February 22 2009, 07:47:42 UTC

And lots of really, really talented writers...*tempts*

mizface February 16 2009, 05:47:34 UTC

Fraser can go right on living in that perfect Chicago of his. I’ll be watching his back from this one.

Oof. This line especially packed a punch, though I loved it all. Loved Ray for getting Fraser help, using whatever he had to to get results. And love that he'll never let on what he said to do it, that he'll let Fraser keep his Chicago in his head.

keerawa February 17 2009, 09:10:18 UTC

I (just like Fraser) assumed that the officers were acting against Warfield because it was the right thing to do - until this week, when I started thinking it through. Thank you for the comment, mizface!

j_s_cavalcante February 16 2009, 05:54:03 UTC

Kapow! A haymaker from RayK fells the opposition.

Stella would be awed.

Brilliant work!

Worth the rewrites. :)

keerawa February 17 2009, 09:11:27 UTC

Huh. You know, I think you're right. Stella has certainly used a jury's worst instincts to get them to convict, and I'm sure she'd be delighted to see Ray pulling this off. Ray, however? He'll do it, because it needs doing. But he's not proud of it.

j_s_cavalcante February 17 2009, 09:30:57 UTC

You know what? I don't think Stella would be proud of herself in that circumstance, either. She'd be satisfied that she'd done the right thing in a bad situation. I keep thinking of her face when Dwayne the bomber confronts his ex-wife on the steps of the courthouse, or when she realizes Orsini has deceived her and broken the law. She's a good person, and she does what she has to do to maintain the right. Hm. No wonder Ray adores her. He's got a thing for those types. :)

Huh. Sadly, I have no Stella icon. :(