Comments | kayliemalinza: WiP ficlet dump: "Ianto Jones fit perfectly into bullet points." (PG, 398 words, Jack/Ianto)

kayliemalinza

WiP ficlet dump: "Ianto Jones fit perfectly into bullet points." (PG, 398 words, Jack/Ianto)

May 23, 2010 22:27

( I was going somewhere profound with this, I'm sure.... )

fic: pg, tw: jack/ianto, fic: teaser, tw: s1, torchwood

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circury May 24 2010, 04:05:16 UTC

This is intriguing. Is something timy-wimy going on there?

kayliemalinza May 25 2010, 05:13:42 UTC

I don't actually remember what I intended. I did write up some notes, however, so I'll just c&p them wholesale. They're vague on plot, but there's a nifty conversation?

bulletpoints(notes).doc

In 1941, the crew have to avoid Previous!Jack.

J: Ianto, go distract me.
I: How?
J: (rips Ianto's shirt open)
I: Oh.

Ianto seduces (allows himself to be seduced by) Previous!Jack via a local drink; he sits on a low wall and leans over to get a cup, pours it for Previous!Jack. Ianto holds it out; Previous!Jack comes from behind and grasps his wrist; nuzzles his ear.

I: That was so weird.
J: Did you enjoy yourself? (grin)
I: (sideways stare)
J: (unrepentant)
I: Isn't this going to cause problems?
J: Nope.
I: Won't you recognize me when we meet again?
J: You mean when we met before. (smirk)
I: Jack.
J: No, I won't slash didn't recognize you.
I: Have we changed history, then?
J: No, I just didn't remember you.
I: You forgot that.
J: Well, that was two hundred years ago for me! A lot happened before I met you again ( ... )

kel_reiley May 25 2010, 06:50:12 UTC

um... I LOVE THIS AND WANT IT NOW! you can't just SHOW ME A PUPPY and expect me to not want to take it home!

kayliemalinza May 25 2010, 23:39:15 UTC

Do you regularly steal other people's dogs? o.O

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order_of_chaos May 24 2010, 04:49:00 UTC

WiP or not, this stands on its own rather well, in a tip-of-the-iceberg kind of way. I think so, anyway. I like the bullet-points-that-weren't at the beginning, and the way the temporal-paradox-ness of it creeps in gradually, a bit more each paragraph.

And this, because it's such a concise way of saying everything:
He hired Ianto because he already had, and couldn't fire him because he hadn't yet.

kayliemalinza May 25 2010, 05:16:08 UTC

I was hoping it did stand well on its own, so I could offer it for WiP amnesty. I suppose you've been noticing that trend lately...?

kel_reiley May 25 2010, 06:47:17 UTC

OOH! I LOVE THIS ONE TOO! timey-wimey or whatever is going on here, this is my favoritest thing right now :)

kayliemalinza May 25 2010, 23:51:45 UTC

The timey-wimey was such a great asset for the TW-verse, and I sort wish they'd used it more. Even DW, lately, didn't take full advantage (imho.)