Comments | kayliemalinza: Ramble!verse fic: 1,081 words, Pike POV, Pike+Pike!Sis, rated PG

kayliemalinza

Ramble!verse fic: 1,081 words, Pike POV, Pike+Pike!Sis, rated PG

Apr 09, 2010 00:33

I'm posting the first section of my Pike!POV prototype fic so I can get some feedback. This is technically meant to fill Chaos' prompt for "More of the Horse?" from that meme post from ages ago (See? SEE? I am still working on it! Actually there are a couple of fills I need to type up ( Read more... )

don't love me i will only hurt you, st: ramble!verse, it could work, fic: chaptered wip, fic, star trek, fic: pg, fic: draft

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rubynye April 9 2010, 13:08:55 UTC

Love this, love her, love that he can staredown a CAT, love your descriptosity, being paged, FML.

kayliemalinza April 13 2010, 04:34:37 UTC

Thank you so much, you're always so frickin' nice. :P

I'm very glad you picked out the part with the cat-- it's ~thematically important but I didn't want to make too big a deal of it.

possibly_thrice April 9 2010, 21:52:29 UTC

I ALSO AM EXCITED ABOUT THE DOG. WRITE IT.

(and you are pretty fucking good at internals *and* externals, it's like, cubist!

(also I want Elena to lock me in a closet))

kayliemalinza April 13 2010, 04:54:21 UTC

Yes ma'am! (ok, not THE dog, but a dog nonetheless.)

Thank you so much! I beat this thing mercilessly and it finally cooperated. Hopefully the rest won't be so difficult. Are there any parts which you thought were particularly IC or in his voice?

(o rly? In a ~sisterly way, or are your intentions... suspect?)