non-Ramble!fic in Ramble!verse: McCoy+Ex+Joanna fluff, 629 words, PG

[kayliemalinza]

This was written as part of the sentences meme; Muppet requested McCoy and The Ex. In terms of the sentences, I have this labeled as "Humor/Angst." Yes, at the same time. Don't look at me like that, I'm just special, ok

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[stunt_muppet]

*hugs* It is like you are constantly giving me presents.

Must run now, because I've got a quiz what needs attending to, and I will try to leave more detailed feedback later, but my favorite bit:

His daughter's birth installed a new organ in his body, some blood-rich growth wedged among the coils of his intestines. It nourishes and pains him by turns and sometimes both at once.

Because it's visceral and raw and perfect.

[kayliemalinza]

You know what's funny? I considered taking that line out, because I thought it was "too much" or too sentimental. Shows what I know, heh. :P

i'm slightly worried that i've copied the "innocence organ" from my who_remix fic last year but oh well. i am having way too much fun with all the medical stuff.

[rubynye]

Maybe Leonard's paranoid but he can't help it. His daughter's birth installed a new organ in his body, some blood-rich growth wedged among the coils of his intestines. It nourishes and pains him by turns and sometimes both at once. He's been stupider for worse reasons.

Have I told you lately that I love how you write? And McCoy's ex is all kinds of awesome -- the only thing I can't see is how they fell apart.

*kisses Joanna's cheeks*

[kayliemalinza]

I don't think you told me lately, but that is because I have been producing much (insert frustrated whining here), not because you are anything less than the nicest, most supportive person ever.

There's a whole story in how/why they fell apart-- I'll get to it eventually. It's not fun. :(

P.S. Did Joanna come off ok? I don't interact a lot with children but you do, so I'd like to hear what you thought. In this fic, I'm worried that she's too capable-- I'm fairly sure that a kindergartner can work a DVR if they've been taught to, especially if it's a ~future DVR marketed to be simple enough for kids. Is that reasonable?

[rubynye]

Short reply -- I love your Joanna. I could HEAR the air-quotes, word-of-the-day enunciation on 'racial slur'. And I pegged her right around 5-6, so there you are.

[order_of_chaos]

OMG they are awesome. Vivid, amazing characters.

Suddenly it really, really hurts that they break up.

[kayliemalinza]

:D I've been working with Josa and Joanna for a while, so they are real, fleshed-out people to me (unlike Luke, who exists only in the words I've written, but somehow has agency anyway.)

:(
it's ok, josa keeps showing up again. she is maybe kinda sorta pike's first choice for xo.