TW fic: "Bezoar For Touching" (Jack/Ianto, Gwen; 1,070 words, post S2, PG-13)

[kayliemalinza]

Title: Bezoar For Touching
Rating: PG-13
Word Count: 1,070
Setting: Post S2
Characters: Jack/Ianto, Gwen
Summary: There's a Jell-O monster eating everything; Ianto ruminates.
Warning: Poety and obtuse; present tense. Highlight for spoilers: implied/ambiguous character deaths.Teaser: Jack shudders, vomits, scrabbles with his hands for something he

Comments

[kayliemalinza]

Thanks! I know I write mostly fluff, but every once in a while I have the urge to be really mean to characters, hee.

[fanbot]

Wow! Powerful!

[kayliemalinza]

Thanks!

[jo02]

I read this fic this morning (my time) and I thought, "strange, weird . . . but somehow compelling."

It's been bouncing around the back of my mind all day, then it finally hit me why!

I kept feeling like I didn't know what was going on and that I should have - and that's because it reads like a small section out of a much larger story.

So. Um. Do we get to see the rest of it?

[kayliemalinza]

::shrug:: What's posted is what I got--this was largely freewritten. I like that it's bothering you, though. Does that make me mean? :P

Thanks for commenting. ^_^

[rhia_starsong]

Of course this makes you mean (though I'm used to it, I suppose, as this actually seemed complete to me)!

My favourite bit: the tensile string linking his belly to Jack's grin

Gorgeous. Love the way you have Ianto and Gwen saving the day, especially the whole exploding Jello Monster Acid of Dooom (TM) at the end.

[kayliemalinza]

this actually seemed complete to me)!
Ooh! You must be super-duper used to it, considering that you told me once you hate short stories because they never seem complete.

Thing is, this story is bare and elliptical-- I'm kinda shoving the reader headlong without explaining much-- but I like that sometimes? Maybe it also feel complete because *I* don't know any more details.

"tensile" is one of my favorite words. ^^

AHAHAHAHA. Jello Monster Acid of Dooom! I swear one of these days someone is going to tell me, "You can use as many iambs and obscure words as you want, but we can still tell that you're on crack."

[rhia_starsong]

Ooh! You must be super-duper used to it, considering that you told me once you hate short stories because they never seem complete.
I think maybe it's better when you just throw me in headlong, because then it's not something short pretending to be like a long work of fiction, it's a separate entity, a scene.

I swear one of these days someone is going to tell me, "You can use as many iambs and obscure words as you want, but we can still tell that you're on crack."
That's what the Internet's for--we can *always* tell when you're on crack. "Can I just say to the 3.5 of you who are using right now, it's time to share."

[kayliemalinza]

But, really, its not that bad.
Stellar praise! :D

It's a little story-slice, I guess you could say. Like an orange quarter. You need five or six of them to really add up to something, but a slice on its own is yummy and self-contained. ^^ Or maybe I'm just hungry?

Thanks for commenting. ^_^

[phaetonschariot]

*wanders past nigh on a year later*

Like an orange quarter. You need five or six of them to really add up to something

which is really unfortunate when there's only four in an orange.