Dream

[kayden_eidyak]

Week one entry for brigits_flame .

Prompt: Luminary

Wordcount: 900

Note: This was supposed to continue past its current ending, but I ran out of time. Perhaps I will finish it at a later date.

Dream

Helen curled up on the pile of dirty straw in the corner of the cell. It was damp and moldy and stank of urine and the feces of rodents. She covered herself as best she

Comments

[desert_rose]

Kay, you're definitely still in the contest! I'm going through all contestants' LJs to find anyone who posted their entries before 7pm, but didn't link them because they thought they missed the deadline. You will be moving onto week 2 regardless, but I'll still post a poll for you all!

[kayden_eidyak]

Yay!!!! Thank you, thank you, thank you!

[blythe025]

Great job. I enjoyed the way you described the surroundings and the gross-ness of the rats eating the food. And I like how she invents an imaginary family that is almost too good to be true as a kind of comfort in her lonelyness. Very well done.

[vyvyan_wilde]

Can't believe I didn't comment yet.. ( ._.)

Well anyway, I really liked this. It's so bittersweet the way she imagines that family just so, her idea of happiness and comfort.

I think the reason the villagers wouldn't stand up for is because they'd be thought of as witches themselves and thrown in with her. It's unfair, because there's no way for someone to win once accused. That's really tough, but it's good she had something nice to think about in what must be her last few days.

[kayden_eidyak]

Blarg. Welcome to my world of not-commenting. :(

I've read yours! I have...I've just not said I have yet. *more fail*

Thank you V. I did a bit of reading into the witch hunts and it made me very sad.

[vyvyan_wilde]

I do this thing where I read a piece but then am too tired/lame to comment and I tell myself I'll do it later and forget :D

[kayden_eidyak]

Yes! Ohmigosh, yes, that's me. :(

I get that way especially with good stories because I want to say something insightful and intelligent so I figure I should wait til I'm "in the mood." Heh.

[kayden_eidyak]

Thanks, Thora. :) I had wanted to continue it to where she was led from the jailhouse (probably for her hanging or whatever) and found that he light didn't come from a cozy house at all, but something icky and depressing instead. But I couldn't think what it would be and I just ran out of time.

[kayden_eidyak]

Awwww, thanks for such a lovely edit, Raphie! I much appreciate it.

I'm sorry you had to edit one of my sloppier works, but alas, it couldn't be helped. :)