Tipping Point
Title:Tipping Point
Author:kaybee38
Rating: PG (idek)
Pairings: jongkey, ninja!2min, ninja!jongho, OT 5
Genre: angst
Disclaimer: SHinee is owned by SM Entertainment only.
Summary: Key starts acting strange after his grandmother dies, and it disrupts the whole dorm, Jonghyun is the only one who seems to know what's really going on...
A/N: Ok so this is my ( Read more... )
Author:kaybee38
Rating: PG (idek)
Pairings: jongkey, ninja!2min, ninja!jongho, OT 5
Genre: angst
Disclaimer: SHinee is owned by SM Entertainment only.
Summary: Key starts acting strange after his grandmother dies, and it disrupts the whole dorm, Jonghyun is the only one who seems to know what's really going on...
A/N: Ok so this is my ( Read more... )
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I was so sad when I heard about Key's grandma and I totally get how he felt...the guilt and all that, I understand it all so well
and when he showed that post-it and talked about what he had said to his grandma I was so sad ;__;
you captured all that perfectly in the fic and I love how you made onew the responsable leader model
this was good
kudos on your first fic ;D
<333~
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Thank you! I'm really glad you liked it. I guess I kinda mixed up Key's grandmothers, but in the end I'm glad the story still worked. I like thinking of Onew as responsible.
...and sexy *coughs*
But that's for another fic entirely.
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<3333~
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I'm incoherent right now. Crying so hard.
Where did you come from?!?! This blindsided me, but in a really good way. Seriously, I saw that you'd written a fic and went from ? to O_O to ^__^ to ;_;
The way you got their voices down, the pacing, all of it was fantastic. I am so happy right now (even with these tears on my face)
So pumped to see what else you bring to the fandom, and I'm extra glad to see you on the writer side of the fence! ^_^
*throws confetti*
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Thanks for your comments about the pacing and their voices, I was really hoping how they sounded in my head made sense.
I'm so happy right now you have no idea!
**hopping around catching confetti and grinning like Onew***
P.S.- I love your most recent "OnTae Drabble" abot the bubbles and "Narrowed Vision" was HAWT!
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thank you for asking me to read this!! i'm not that great though to give cc and stuff :/
anyways, this was really good!! to be your first fic!!
i think your grammar is expectionally good and the plot follows a steady line :)
you have a huge potential! you really do :) and practice makes perfect right ^^?
but i don't think you need more practice! hehe :)
it's soo sad that key lost his grandma :/ but the grandma that died was not the one that Key was talking about in strong heart ^^
it was the other one! his maternal one i think...
the one that raised him and stuff its still alive :)
thank god right!!?? just wanted to point that out but its okay
if you already knew ^^
overall, it was interesting and truly a nice first fic!
i will look forward to reading more from youu!!
HWAITING! &hearts :)
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(facepalms) I thought that he started to talk about the grandmother that died, and then at some point switched to talking about the other one that's still alive that was giving him music advice. Between the subs (I don't speak Korean) and the bad editing of the show, I guess I got confused. Oh well, at least it's fiction right? I'm such a fail. *sniff*
----------> runs. hides.
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at first i thought that too!! but then i started searching and stuff
and the grandma that raised him and stuff is his dad's mom
the one that died is his maternal grandmother
it kinda threw me off in strong heart when he started saying how
his grandma listens to his songs and stuff lol
haha i even thought "he talks to his dead mother everyday??"
but yeah, i think that if it was THAT gradmother that died and not the other one
he would've been more sad telling those storiess!! :)
but this is fanfiction haha so no need to worry about that!! ^^
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Period.
Ever.
"Burbank High" is really good too and "Cocoa Puffs" makes me cry right along with Key.
My muse wants to be your muse when it grows up!
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But anyway, on to your fic.
I absolutely loved it, I really did! Strangely enough, my favorite part aside from the ninja!2min was Jinki taking charge. You wrote his part really well, and just the whole fic was very powerful!
I felt so bad when Key's grandmother died ;___; I don't think the grandmother he was referencing was the one who passed away though (although I'm not 100% sure; I only vaguely remember the ep cut). Either way though, the fic was beautiful and heartbreaking, but in a good way I think :)
Thanks for sharing hun! I can't believe this was your first fic! You had very few grammatical errors and it flowed really well. I can't wait to read your next fic ♥
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I'm an idiot.
I thought the first part of his Strong Heart comments were about the grandmother who died (including the post-it part), and then the rest were about his other grandmother still here.
But (sigh) at least it's fiction.
Thank you so much for reading and commenting I really appreciate it though! I'm glad you like Jinki's part. That's kind of how I visualize him you know? I saw Jinki give Taemin a look once in an interview when the maknae spaced out and failed to answer a question and I was like "Oooooh wait till they get home."
Nope it's in jongkey, but not replay, please lemme know where else you think it should go and I'll post it there too.
Gonna post some funny but fail smut shortly, and then on to my crazy epic chaptered-fic.
(My muse has been kicking my ass!)
*hugs*
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Oooh I'm intrigued now! I'm sure all of them are gonna be amazing :)
Hmm, well, replay is any shinee fic, but you should post at smshinee as well, everything can go there :) And ofc, there are all the ship comms, taeminho, onkey, jongyu, (others that i'm joined to but they're the more obscure pairings lol).
All the best hun! /hugs/ ♥
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