WORK IN PROGRESS: If You Could Read My Mind pt. 3 [R/S - R]

[kyasuriin]

Title: If You Could Read My Mind... part three
Summary: part three of If You Could Read My Mind.  Part One Part Two.
This is the part in which our favourite werewolf gets attacked by Death Eaters and our favourite animagus calls out the wrong name at a crucial point.
Rating: PG-13, R overall
Authors Notes: Concrit is welcome, in fact more than

Comments

[anonymous]

Oh, I am thoroughly enjoying this! Keep going!

(Sorry that's not more helpful, but my brain is fried at the moment ^__^)

[kyasuriin]

heh, thank ya :)

[skylark74]

Ooh I really like this. Can't wait for the next installment.

[kyasuriin]

thanks, so glad you liked!

[rissabby]

I just found this this morning too. I like that Remus is the one out having an adventurous job while Sirius is home cooking yummy veggie meals for him. I like the UST so far, and loved the dancing.

For concrit, I have a few typo thingies. It's only for this chapter, I forgot to do the other ones.

part III
He suppose he did enjoy having an object of affection over which his thoughts could linger.<\i>
try: supposed

but just the thought that they got to share something more intimate than he would ever be privilege to made Remus’ insides ache.<\i>
try: privileged

took off into the London rain and faded into sight.<\i>
try: faded out of sight

[kyasuriin]

ahh, thanks so much, shall change asap! :)

concrit comment cont..

[rissabby]

You mentioned at one point that they were both seventeen. So, they are 'of age' for the Wizarding World and should be able to use their wands at home.

[yue_d]

Wow... that was SOOO good.... oh my goodness, was Remus awake when Sirius pulled that subtle maneuver~? ooooooh *insides are tingling* I honestly can't wait for more! Please update soon~!

[kyasuriin]

lol, thank ya :D