Original Slash: Limited (repost)

[kat_lair]

This was originally written for and published in the Gay Flash Fiction online zine, now reposted here as their copyright has ran out.

Title: Limited
Author: Mistress Kat / kat_lair 
Fandom: Original slash fic
Pairing/Category: m/m, experimental
Rating: PG-13
Word count: 444
Summary: There is no number four

Author notes: Thank you to moth2fic  and razorxrosary  for looking

Comments

[slashxmistress]

Wow-ouch. That is very beautiful in a melancholy kind of way.
The pov's give it a transitory feeling that's a great analogy for a one night stand. It works for me :)

[kat_lair]

Thank you very much. I played with the povs in part for the sheer experimentation and in part to convey that kind of mixed-up, sometimes removed, sometimes intimate feel so I'm pleased it worked for you. Thanks for taking the time to read and comment, means a lot to me.

[planetkiller]

I love this in a crazy kind of stalker love. Thanks for posting.

[kat_lair]

There is nothing wrong with a crazy stalker love, I would totally bring you tea while you skulked in the bushes outside my window :D Thank you for reading and commenting, makes me all warm and smiley!

[sadiane]

Guh, I love that last line!

This feels, rather oddly, like some sort of fictional origami, all foldy and twisted up on itself, and like it should be nothing but then suddenly, one last spin and it's a paper crane, beautiful and fragile in totally unexpected ways.

[kat_lair]

You have no idea how happy I am that the last line worked for you. Some of the comments I received about it was that it makes no sense, which I guess logically it doesn't, but I refused to change it anyway because it makes sense to me and it was what brought the whole thing together for me.

Also, thank you so much for you feedback. Your comparison to fictional origami was amazing, I actually choked up a little bit, this has to be the most beautiful thing anyone has ever said about my writing.

[sadiane]

Crazy people! 450 words of experiments fic, and they require the last line to make instant and perfect sense without having to think about it? Well, it makes sense to me, but then I obviously have a fondness for the strange metaphor - see above.

Now, if only I could get my brain to write fiction that is a comfortable with bizarre descriptions as it is describing other people's fiction. Though my first though was more in the line of "Dude, this is all spinny"

[kat_lair]

Hee! "Dude, this is all spinny" describes so much about my life... *g*