NaNoWriMo - Fullmetal Alchemist Fanfic - Chapter 8

[kashiwrites]

(See Chapter 7)

Major Vanova, when she arrived, paused in the doorway at the sight of Roy Mustang lounging all over Maes Hughes’s chair while Maes himself sat on a corner of the desk, arms folded across his chest and ankles crossed as he stretched his legs out before him.

He gave her a wan smile as she appeared. “We’ve got an extra passenger,” he

Comments

[eranith]

I love Maes' analysis of Roy's tactics to convince Vanova that he is coming, and her subsequent responses. Good use of parentheses and capitalisation.

[kashiwrites]

The idea kind of suggested itself, as I was thinking of Roy the Great Manipulator, and how he might wrangle his way into going along. And then I thought how Hughes tended to see the lighter side of things, and that's when the idea of The Game came into my head. :-)

[amorphic]

I loved the banter. And I totally agree with eranith, Maes' observations were total win -- shows how well he knows Roy =) Can't wait for the next installment! ^^

[kashiwrites]

I always enjoy how Roy needs Hughes to keep him loose. Or well, as loose as Roy can be, hee! I love writing the two of them together.