"Seven Years"

[karlamartinova]

The house is quiet, too quiet. The noon passed few minutes ago but the room is hidden in darkness, the large white curtains aren’t allowing any light in. The large bed in the middle looks almost empty, the one occupant is curled on her side, her face mostly covered by the comforter. She’s small, almost tiny for her age and so deep in her sleep

Comments

[the_silverdoe]

It wasn't bad at all ;)
I really enjoyed reading it, the rhythm is good, you manage to make your characters believable very quickly, and the story was interesting to follow, it ended up being different than what I thought it would be at the beginning, and I liked that! Maybe it could use some beta-ing for the grammar and some little things, but not much.
It's nice to read original stuff from you :)

[karlamartinova]

I enjoy writing original stuff as well, writing "all mine" feels pretty well. But yeah, it needs some work, a lot of work, I am still trying to find my voice and writing too many different genres. Hopefully one day.

And thank you for your lovely comment, made my day :)