Two fer one and one for all--something like that

[kara_gnome]

I finished Toymaker (again). It's different. I think it's better, right now it's all over the place, but I think it's got more story in it. I tried, anyway. Smoothing is in my immediate future, and then I've got a possible bead on new eyes for it, I think. It's hard to ask, because everyone's so busy. Which, this is not a call for volunteers,

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Toymaker

[namelessarchon]

I know, I know, you don't ever send me anything, but you have my email if you need a look at Toymaker. I have a good deal of free time this weekend, so it wouldn't be an issue to have a look.

Re: Toymaker

[kara_gnome]

See, I think this proves I have the nicest f-list on Earth :)

I want to keep things apart, though. See, with you as my LJ friend I can say, "I'm the greatest writer on the planet!" and you couldn't prove me wrong.

It's the darn critique friends who are a problem. ;-D.

I want my blog to stay light and fun, and if I bring you guys into my writing, then we're business. It's not the same, you know?

[mordraeth]

You know, I don't think I ever read toymaker... So if you want some eyes, I'll volunteer. Even though you're not asking, I'm still offering.

[kara_gnome]

Thank you so much :). just knowing that you're there is so good.

Regarding LH, are you going to Flash this time? If you've said on your blog, I missed it or haven't read it yet. I flashed last week, and got a few votes, but no pips (boo-hoo!)

How can I add to my vast pip collection if no one votes for my story!? What is wrong with those people!!? :D

[mordraeth]

I've not flashed in a while, just working on my own lately. I came down with Strep this last week too, so that's impacted things a bit. But mostly writing on my own, working on my novel. I haven't worked on any shorter pieces in a few weeks, though I have plenty that needs revision/submitting.

[kara_gnome]

Strep's really rough. It's one of those things that makes you wonder how did they survive before antibiotics.

I'm glad about your novel, and that it's going well and coming along for you.

[theladywolf]

/but it's been a case of seeing someone reaping the harvest he sowed, and I am loving, loving, loving it/

Oh yeah, these are the work moments worth living for. :)

I think I read Toymaker way back in a Polish Challenge. Did I ever crit it? Or maybe I just read it and didn't crit. Anyway, if you want a crit let me know.
I've just critted some work for another LJer and he asked for specific questions to be addressed.
I found it a very focused way of going about a crit and something I must consider in the future, especially If I'm having doubts and problems with a story.

[kara_gnome]

//Oh yeah, these are the work moments worth living for. :)//

So true! It's the little things that matter :-D

You didn't give a crit for the original flash, but those who did found the story a slog to get through. Do you read flashes when you don't have to critique them? That is really nice of you. I sort of read on a need-to basis, regarding flashes.

This flash started with the toymaker of this hobble bobble town and all these wonderful toys and the toymaker matches one with a child. The other children become murderous-feeling because of jealousy, and the toymaker can feel all these emotions, but he doesn't respond to them and then the children all go home.

Which, that's a thing. Ever since Bell's book on plot, I can see that I really do write vignettes :).

[kara_gnome]

And thank you for your offer, too, you guys all rock!