Yaoilicious? Its smutastic!

[kaphinated]

Renji slowly woke, blinking at the weak light, resisting the pull into consciousness, eager to stay in the soft, darkness a little longer. Gradually he became aware of the warmth and quiet breathing next to him, the realisation making his skin tingle. Closing his eyes again, he remembered the feeling of that body moving over him in the blackness,

Comments

[clinicly8insane]

Nyaa~ Kate-pyon.... you flatter me much! *rolls around* you have to put up with my greedyness! "More sex! I want fooood smeeex... CHOCOLATE!"

didn't I say crepes?

[kaphinated]

Patience my child. I'll try ..... *mumbles* I don't even like chocolate....*grin*

NEFink for you, sweetheart ;)

[gogo_ergo_sum]

Yay!! I adore the hawt, hawt urgency of your writing. Pls keep it up! If I could, I would fuss a bit with your punctuation, tho. Pls don't take that as a negative. I'm an editor and english composition teacher by day. I can't help but fuss at punctuation!

[kaphinated]

Feel free to fuss away. In fact, do! This whole typing the stuff i think thing all pretty new to me, so I write stuff, and at the time I think its good and then when I look back at it, I think "Gah! It's poor".
So do you're worst! Make me better! I live in a world of red pen, so I'm used to it.

[gogo_ergo_sum]

The passion, emotion, and hawt raw desire comes through so well in your writing. I'd be happy to gently beta your stuff before you post. Just let me know.

[kaphinated]

Yeah cool, the more input the better. feel free to C&P or email me if you want it in M$ word format.

kaphine@hotmail.com

[shinimegami21]

LOL better indeed! i thoroughly enjoyed this fic!, especially the double lemon. man that was hot...

[kaphinated]

ooooh ta. i tried, then someother ppl tried harder. hehehee so thank these ppl: clinicly8insane and gogochan.

[ogichi]

OMG THAT WAS HOT *_____* <33 more sex!!1

[kaphinated]

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[caramelmilkntea]

You..You don't like chocolate?! Then oh why~yy did I give you my EXTRASPECIAL chocolate chip cookie?! *cries her heart out*
Bu-but it's the thought that counts,right? I'll just give you a peanutcookie then.. And if you say you are allergic to peanut I'll just go and..and..buy you a normal one. *mumbles*

[kaphinated]

See now you have consumed the collected works of the K8 and found out my deathly secret - I don't like chocolate. Not allergic tto peanuts tho, never fear ^__*

thanks a lot!