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kalypso_01

Disconnect - Revised

Jan 11, 2013 13:43

fleshed out a little - here's a new version

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eve11 January 12 2013, 00:29:47 UTC

This one seems spare, to me; I get a theme of loneliness or longing. I think the narrator was hoping that they wouldn't have to go home by themselves. Birds in the snow searching around for the things that keep them going, like the person waking up alone and looking for scattered comfort?

kalypso_01 January 12 2013, 04:29:59 UTC

I meant this poem to kinda be an invitation to make your own story, so there's no wrong interpretation.... but I will say (sheepishly) that the inspiration came from forgetting my iPhone, so perhaps that gives a different dimension to it as well.

kalypso_01 January 12 2013, 13:11:09 UTC

I think I will revise the first line of the second stanza to "my latest love"

eve11 January 12 2013, 15:59:43 UTC

Ah so is it the phone that accidentally got left behind at the cafe?

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