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manaconda in kakuhidan

Fic--more zealot!Hidan

Oct 27, 2007 10:14

Title: Smother
Genre: Angst.
Character/Pairing: KakuHidanKaku
Rating: PG
Wordcount: 301
Summary: Hidan knows that sometimes you need to be cruel to be kind. Semi-AU

( They are all creatures of sin and the Lord Jashin grants no second chances... )

w - blue_mango, fic

Comments 3

scarlaluna October 28 2007, 01:12:50 UTC

You, my friend, have won a internet. *offers a sprinkle cookie* *___*

I really liked this piece of writing. It is definitely in character, and it fits with what would seem to be Hidan's trail of thought. Its not cheesy enough to be consdiered cheesy; the smell is definitely better. XD; I'm being honest with you: this is amazing. Its short and to the point, yet still leaves you with the emotion. The ending was great.

Five stars, I'd say. I can't find anything for you to fix. The words 'bloody embrace' really appealed.

manaconda October 28 2007, 03:40:01 UTC

Thanks for your input!:DDD

Ah~ cheesiness is something I'm always worried about it. My writing is so melodramatic xD;

shail_666 November 9 2007, 02:18:56 UTC

Well here I was, awed and pleased with everything and I wrote a long review, but then my internet cut out and when I hit back on the browser it erased everything. D:

Anyway, I really liked this! I read it over again and entertained the instant *o*

I like how you've over come the archetype where Kakuzu had most power in the relationship and that you've written it in Hidan's perspective. This is sad and sweet and short and Mmph. <3 If you are adding more I'd definetly read it, but for now this is great. It is a short drabble but it has everything that I'd like to see in a piece of fic~ =D

Not cheesy at all! :D