Underneath It All (Chapter 2)

[kakashi2000]

This is the next installation of the story....

Series : The Scraecrow And The Dolphin
Title : Underneath It All (Book1)
Part : Chapter 2 _ A Matter OF Opinion
Summary :  Things are getting from bad to worse for Kakashi and Iruka
Disclaimer :  I don't own Naruto.

CHAPTER 2

A MATTER OF OPINION

The tension in the room was strung high and everyone felt it.

Comments

[premium_shaday]

“ This will only take a while ” he answered, then patted her rounded hips “ Stay warm for me. ”
OMFG. Is that supposed to be dirty?
I definitely read it like that.

Stupid Kakashi. Being all hurtful to Ru-chan and whatnot. *sigh*
Beautiful writing. Watch your tenses though. You switch between past and present frequently. I used to do that ALL THE TIME. Then I read a good story with BAD tense and I realized how irritating it is. So, yeah... watch that.

[kakashi2000]

"Stay warm for me"...errr...I guess it was meant to be dirty, I think...hahaha
And yes Shaday-sensei, I will deffinately be more mindful of my tenses or I will run 100 laps around Konoha...heheehe
On a more serious note, thank you for your pointer. The editting was done late at night with a boggled mind, thanx again.

[kattmad]

ARGH...slutty Kakashi...breaking promises...hurt Iruka...
You are writing a very powerful story, good emotional trials (good writing, maybe not good for KakaIru)