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New Year's Entry

Jan 01, 2010 11:14

GAH Sorry it is so late! This is my entry to the New Year's Stroke of Midnight contest! It may not be much, but it was the best I could do with the word count. :)

Title: Wandered Off
Genre: General
Rating: K
Words: 1498

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rating: g, author: eldrfire, word challenge #4, fanfic

Comments 9

lilith112 January 1 2010, 17:41:49 UTC

You posted! :D

I love Sakura here; she's so cute and adorable and I GIVE YOU THE OFFICIAL BADGE OF SQUEE-NESS! :D You are the second recipient... after nymph. Be honored ;D

Anyways, love how Kakashi was portrayed and of course, love this line: "They circled the moon, twisting like pink and green ribbons." :D Forehadowing ftw... the way I interpreted it, the moon (silver) represents Kakashi and the pink and green obviously represents Sakura and the ribbons symbolizes the changing nature of their relationship (from student/teacher to lovers *wink wink*) and and how their futures are entwined with each other. The fact that the ribbons are circling the moon... er, I guessed that to be kinda like Sakura will be the one to heal the wounds in Kakashi's heart? Because I imagined the ribbons circling, embracing the moon O.o Or maybe I'm overthinking it.

Gah, look at my fail attempt to be smart :p Whatevs. Awesome oneshot and write maaawwwwwrrr :D

bluerising January 1 2010, 18:41:34 UTC

Omigosh. This is so cute. What a fantastic take on Anbu Kakashi and Little Sakura. It's always fun seeing the serious teen try to cater to the younger child.

inner_angel January 1 2010, 20:37:25 UTC

So cute! I awwwwww'd my way through it :)
Thanks for sharing! <3

thesoundofsisu January 1 2010, 21:50:45 UTC

This totally made me grin because it was the cutest thing ever. It was totally different from everything I've read and just completely adorable. I think the part I liked most was the banter:

Her gaze darted guiltily to the side. “Well, it’s past my bedtime. How old are you?”

“Nineteen. And you?”

“Five. If you’re only nineteen, why is your hair gray?”

“Why is yours pink?”

I can just see that being revisited later on. *g* Nice job!

zelha January 1 2010, 22:30:55 UTC

Aw, Eldr, this is simply lovely! :D I adore chibi!Sakura and teen!Kakashi, they're so cute!! ♥

Beautiful piece! :D