December Free Fiction: Advent Story: Thear Collection: Conall: 989 words

[kajones_writing]

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[ysabetwordsmith]

>>It may not be during our lifetime, or ever our children's lifetime, <<

That should say "even" above.

>>The priest of Poseidon was stood in a large group of people<<

Delete "was" above.

>>Very few of the priests and priestess who exist now are connected to the deity they profess to be a priest of<<

That should say "priestesses" above. Also, "profess to represent" would be more representative and elegant.