December Free Fiction: Advent Story: Thear Collection: Trey: 1113 words

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[ocean_queen1990]

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[ysabetwordsmith]

>>in order to fulfil his duty <<

That should say "fulfill" above.

>> There would be people watching, in the same way there always was<<

Subject/verb disagreement: change "was" to "were" above.

>>it was obvious the words weren't met<<

I think that should say "meant" above.

>>He is the son of the Dorma supremacist movement and I just don't like or trust him.”<<

That should probably say "Dorma supremacist leader" or somesuch.