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Title: Insomnia

Aug 29, 2010 21:50

Title: Insomnia
Author: kaitlia777
Rating: T
Fandom: The Mentalist
Characters: Jane, Lisbon, mentions of others
Disclaimer: They're not mine. Damn it
Summary: Insomnia sucks
Spoilers: Up to and including 2.23 Red Sky in the Morning
Notes: Written for spyglass_ on the Mentalist Fic Prompt Meme

( It had begun with a thump. )

the mentalist, fic, prompt

Comments 6

shanachie_quill August 30 2010, 04:56:54 UTC

Awww that is beyond adorable. I love it.

Would ya like me to run through it and correct it tomorrow evening?

yaba324 August 30 2010, 06:25:13 UTC

awww that's sweet! I actually really like what you did with the prompt. You took something that has been mentioned in fic before, especially around these two, and not only created a good basis for it, but also made it seem somehow pure and sweet and almost free of complication. Aside from a few typos, the story flowed effortlessly for me. Great job!

kaitlia777 August 30 2010, 18:37:34 UTC

Thanks!

LOL, yes, typos are the enemy...and possibly the by-product of writing this while on painkillers.

spyglass_ August 30 2010, 14:50:05 UTC

This is very sweet. Thanks for writing it :)

kaitlia777 August 30 2010, 18:36:22 UTC

chizuru_chibi August 31 2010, 20:04:45 UTC

Every time I read a fic of yours I find myself liking them more and more. They're very subtle, flowy, in-character and sweet.

This one in particular was very well constructed, and I liked all the little details you put into it, such as Jane having multi-layered clothing even on pijamas, that he tried to put his hands on his non-existent pockets and stuff like that. They make the story earn cookie points in my book :)

Lovely ♥