Ouran High School Host Club > Fanfic/Drabbles > Some Princes Become Kings (Part 3)

[kagayachou]

Title: Some Princes Become Kings (Part 3)
Author: Kagaya Chou (my deviantART account is used more than my LJ account)
Characters/Pairing: Ohtori Kyouya + Suoh Tamaki
Rating: PG-13 (suggestive themes)
Words: 1000 (10 of 100 drabbles, Kyouya-centric at odd numbers; Tamaki-centric at even)
Summary: A hundred reasons between them, each worth far more

Comments

[wrong]

I aboslutely adore the little nuances as well as the sense of continuity that you have woven in these shorts. The development of Kyouya and Tamaki's relationship is absolutely lovely, and you filled in the gaps in the manga very well, without making it too overly obvious.

You had a very nice touch balancing Tamaki's and Kyouya's perspectives regarding each other and the situation that they found himself in, although I found Kyouya's sections a little...strange. I'm not entirely sure if he would wax lyrical about Tamaki, but your writing is very smooth and it wasn't very jarring.

I especially liked the mother-hen aspects of Kyouya. It's something I've noticed about him in the manga but can't quite put a name to it, but you've pulled it off very nicely.

I wait anxiously for the next installment.

[kagayachou]

Thank you. I really tried to fill in the gaps, and suggest whatever gave them the idea of a host club that turned into their particular host club, with their fancy costumed events, and obscure reasoning.

I'm glad you found their perspectives balanced. With Kyouya's part, I wasn't entirely too sure with the poetics either, but it fit, to me at least, in the sense that while Kyouya himself is very unromantic and opportunistic, he allows Tamaki to let him dream, just a bit. I also made an assumption about Ouran, that Shakespeare and other Classics etc might be required texts, so even though Kyouya normally doesn't wax lyrical, it wouldn't be foreign to him. ^_^

Hehe, I suppose he's a bit of a mother hen. When I was writing him, the term didn't quite register to me either, but I recall thinking 'he wants to be adult. he needs some responsibility. like looking after someone'.

Thanks again. I may take a while for the next installment though, because I'm packing and getting ready to move around the end of this month.

[satora_chan]

I've already said this, but damn I love these serials of yours.

Favourite lines this time around: Kyouya smiled wryly, “He’s my young master, too.” I may have squee-ed right then.

The entirety of the "Tears" drabble. My heart hurt.

[kagayachou]

Why thank you again; it's always nice to know after all ^_~

When I wrote that line, I was smacking myself, thinking 'argh, damn my fangirl mind. shush!' because it was squeeing too, which made it hard to be objective and just write. Then again, if I was objective about this, I probably wouldn't be able to write much ^^;

For "Tears", ... me too.

[kagayachou]

If it's "damn, I love these", I certainly don't hate you repeating yourself. Thank you!

I think Tamaki is still not confident enough with Kyouya in #28 to show when he's upset. Yet. He's already drawing connectings between Kyouya and his mother, and partially realising it, but until he's once again sure of what he wants from Kyouya (mostly likely a parent/friend), he won't be as open as he becomes in the actual series.

Then there's teenage hormones wreaking havoc upon his gentlemanly sensibilities like in #30. Tamaki felt ravished. Kyouya probably felt like he ravished him too O_o

[lovelessnights]

Wonderful! I hope you don't mind, but I would like to friend you. Keep up the good work!

[kagayachou]

Oh, okay. I don't mind. It's just that I hardly use LJ and have only recently been posting on it just for these drabbles. Oh, and I'll be moving around the end of this month so the updates will come a little later.

[red_planet31]

Wide-eyed, Tamaki scoot back. “Everything’s in the trunk, Kyouya. All safely packed.” He was babbling. “Don’t you worry! I packed your toothbrush, and underwear, and... Hey, you’ll have me all weekend.”

The chauffeur coughed.

Love this part. Hehe. Love how you wrote these 3 chapters. Can't wait to read more!!

[kagayachou]

I was hearing Tamaki subconsciously screaming, "Trust me! Love me! I'll be everything you'll ever need!" Couldn't tell if he was manipulating everyone around him with that goal in mind even, which makes him really interesting and amusing to write.

Thank you. I'll be updating a little slower due to moving at the end of the month.

[red_planet31]

Hahaha. I can so imagine Tamaki do that!Love how you write Tamaki and Kyouya! Hehe.

[kagayachou]

Yes! And thanks again! Hehe ^_^