WAP 54

[kaelaaw]

My beta is on her honeymoon right now. Before she got married she left me some notes on things to make clearer which I hopefully did but if not please let me know and I'll fix them. Also if there's something you want me expand on let me know and I'll see if I can work them into future chapters.

Special thanks to littleni and good wishes on her

Comments

[fran_fic]

Gorlyn will be Johar's pen pal :-)

Many interesting things in this part! The mental speaking is almost like this world's version of the mobile phone. I liked seeing the first part from different POV's.

I almost felt sorry for Johar again, Neisk being so very eager to get rid of him (and of Johar being seasick, I know what that's like), but I guess Neisk will see that in some cases having Johar around was easier, Gorlyn as a valet seems like it will be a bit more complicated.

[kaelaaw]

I should write up some letters between the two of them.

Yes! It's based on phones.

I sometimes feel guilty about how I ruined Johar's life but it's not for more then a minute or so.

Neisk thinks it will be great because Gorlyn won't be as pushy about grooming him. Or so Neisk thinks....

[fran_fic]

That would be cool!

I was right! :-)

*LOL* Well, in the end it is fictional characters. You did it in an interesting way! That means you are nice to the story, and that's all that matters.

Okay, I'll be looking forward to reading about that :-)