Worlds Apart Drabble -Tell me what you think

[kaelaaw]

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[shelterfromsky]

Hmmm, me likey. Johar has always been a stick-up-the-ass idiot, hasn't he? I mean I get he's trying to teach Neisk about his station, but could he be less of a mean bastard about it? And oh so sad to see what Arnell was like...

[kaelaaw]

Johar is a bit of a prick isn't he? Do you think the boys sound 5 years old? Or do they talk like older children? I don't write children well.

[shelterfromsky]

Sorry, but I am sooo the wrong person to ask that. Don't know much about kids or what's age appropiate. Don't even like them much... :)

[kaelaaw]

lol I'm living with my niece who is 4 but she has a genius IQ and Autism so she's hardly someone to judge stuff by. Bless her.

[berthablue]

Little Arnell and Neisk are so cute!!!

And Johar. Oh... Johar. Still picturing him in a retirement home being forcefed applesauce.

And now I'm curious - what was the relationship between Johar and Arnell when Arnell and Neisk were older? They continued to know each other, right? I'm sure he never forgave him for making him look stupid and dirty!

[kaelaaw]

They are arn't they.

I'm seriously considering making Johar allergic to apples. lol

Well I wanted to due a bit of Johar's POV again so I thought I'd give you that glimpse.

[dphysh]

Such a shame you can't see me (although for my pride's sake it is probably better that you don't!) as I am dancing for joy at getting this fascinating glimpse of Neisk's childhood. We know what he is like as an adult and now we get to see a little of why that is! I am amazed at how much you managed to pack into a small amount of writing - perfectly balanced! Loving it! :)

[kaelaaw]

Thank you so much. Most of how Neisk is now as an adult is based on Johar and Arnell's influence in his childhood.