Fic: 'Of Things Unsaid'

[juri_anne]

Title: 'Of Things Unsaid' - Fic #4
Pairing: Carson/Rodney - eventual Teyla/Carson/Rodney
Characters: Carson Beckett, Rodney McKay
Spoilers: '38 Minutes'
Rating: PG-13
Word Count: 513
Archive: Would love it to be archived, just lemme know.
Disclaimer: Totally not mine in any way shape or form.

Summary: Rodney opened his mouth a few times to speak

Comments

[juri_anne]

*beams* It means a lot saying that you like this. Thanks!

Of Things Unsaid #4

[slashpuppy]

Yeay, good continuation. I like Rodney trying to work out what's missing.

Minor comments:
'a new disaster to divert.' shouldn't that actually end in a '?' as he's asking a question
'“I was.,” Carson turned' ... no need for the period here
“And you know the sex is wonderful.” needs a question mark

Re: Of Things Unsaid #4

[juri_anne]

Thanks for the grammatical point outs, and the last thing was supposed to be a statement. *smiles*

Re: Of Things Unsaid #4

[slashpuppy]

Cool!

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[victoriaely]

:) Can't wait to see Carson's reaction.

One small observation: Had is only been four hours since he nearly died?
I think you meant 'it' there.

[juri_anne]

Yea, Carson isn't finished with Rodney about this yet. He knows something is wrong. He just doesn't want to push it.

Oh! Thanks for catching that!

btw, I adore your icon! He's got such cute dimples.

[victoriaely]

obaona was taking requests and I wanted a smiling happy Carson :) *sigh*