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[Hikaru no Go] Sins of the Father

Aug 24, 2005 02:10

Title: Sins of the Father
Author: LadySeishou
Series: Hikaru no Go
Word Count: 100
Rating: PG
Challenge: Villains (better late than never?)

( He makes his way around boxes of books )

challenge 16: villains, series: hikaru no go

Comments 6

starry096 August 24 2005, 07:24:51 UTC

I like this. The finality of that last line...Very well written!♥

ladyseishou August 24 2005, 07:49:46 UTC

Thank you! ^___^

It's my first drabble and I found the challenge interesting as I'm usually so wordy. Happy to hear that it worked!

asahifirsa August 24 2005, 18:37:27 UTC

Very nice... you have to actually think a little and that's quite rate :)

ladyseishou August 24 2005, 21:47:51 UTC

Ah yes, the joy in the challenge is to tell the story in 100 words which leaves you relying a lot on the reader reading between the lines. I am happy to hear that you liked it!

clefdecristal September 6 2005, 16:14:26 UTC

;____;
LadaySeishou!!!! It's so cryptic, it makes me think of japanese haiku (simple but full of meaning!)...

I thought (dreadful thought) "OMG something bad happened between aki and hika!!" (because of the "villains" including in the fic info)... and then (got to scrape a bit more detergent-soaked moquette, maybe the detergent fumes inspired me) the inspiration struck (had to put the right name on the right "he" first)...
And I love it!!

ladyseishou September 7 2005, 03:42:09 UTC

You are the first to write about these little stories the way I think about them... I do feel that the drabbles are like haiku or perhaps tanka (haiku's earlier incarnation with haiku's three lines and two more). It is an interesting challenge to tell a little story with only 100 words... you end up using the title or theme as well as hoping that the reader picks up on all the clues that you try to write in between the lines. It is a lot like writing poetry or sketching artwork... what do I want to show? what can I leave out? It can be a lot of fun and immensely satisfying when it works!