Doctor who oneshot -Remnants of Rose

[july_evening]

So this little scene sort of popped into my head and I felt the need to write it. Martha’s POV. Rose/Ten, Martha/Ten (but only in a one sided way).

I do like Martha and it probably shows but as I’ve said before I like the idea of her loving the Doctor and him not loving her back, which is mostly what this little oneshot is about, as well as how Rose

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[akasha_lilian]

Wow, really liked it! Oh the poor Doctor! =( *sniffles*

[july_evening]

Thanks very much.

[july_evening]

Thank you. Cute icon btw.

[shootingstars88]

*sigh* aw that was brilliant in a heartbreaking sort of way. *sniffles* fantastic :)

[july_evening]

Thanks very much. But don't feel too sad. Have a bunny rabbit!
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c(“)(“)

[hotarus_sister]

Absolutely lovely and sweet. You made Martha compassionate and likable (not sure if that makes her out of character : p guess it's a metter of opinion). This was rather heartbreaking and very touching. Good job.

Only crit I would give(because when I first started posting fics I loved concrit) is this: When Martha first starts thinking about when she first went into Rose's room and it's described, I wasn't certain if you were still talking about the first time she went in or if she'd actually walked in again. Once I read "The room felt different today." it was clear, but something to clarify at the beginning might be helpful. Either an added sentance or putting it in italics or... iunno : ) Perhaps I'm just a bit thick.

Anyway, excellent fic. Look forward to more.

[july_evening]

Thank you. It’s so rare to get constructive criticism too! And always welcome.
I was sort of worried that the past and present might get a little squiffed up. It’s problem with heavy internal monologue, everything can get a little confused I find -have you ever tried reading Mrs Dalloway? It’s like staring at your own nose (dizzying). I did try to emphasise the fact that it was a memory by double weighting the past tense (aka using the word ‘had’ a lot.), but it probably needs emphasising a little more, so I’ll put it in italics.
I’m very fond of Martha myself which probably effects my writing of her, but I do see her as a compassionate person -though in a very different way to Rose. I’m glad I made her likeable. I think she is really once you get over the fact that she’s in Rose’s place (though if the Doctor starts falling for her I may become a little less generous ;) ).
Glad you enjoyed it! :D

[pescivendolo]

Aw, I like it a lot. Very sweet. Very well-written.

[july_evening]

Thank You :).