desert

[juju_bees]

here's one of my poems (keep in mind i'm only 10). judge it!:

i lie in the sun-baked sand
as my skin becomes sunburnt
i seem to sink down in it
as the rain comes
and i heal

what do you think?

Comments

[naked_surfer]

Dont know much about poetry but that sounds good to me! Definitely couldnt tell it was written by a 10 yr old!

[juju_bees]

thanks see ya

you are 2cool

[beachborngirl]

Let's see some more of your work! and I like to know that peeps have hope and positvr vibes goin on... bbg