Fic: Together In this Place

[joyfulseeker]

Guys, I wrote a thing! That was too big for one LJ post so cross-posting failed, yayyyyyyyy.

Together In this Place (12952 words) by joyfulseeker
Chapters: 1/1
Fandom: Hockey RPF
Rating: Explicit
Warnings: No Archive Warnings Apply
Relationships: Patrick Kane/Jonathan Toews
Characters: Patrick Kane, Jonathan Toews
Additional Tags: Chicago Blackhawks

Comments

[altri_uccelli]

*\o/* wooo hoooooooo!

you are quick and decisive, girl. I piddle around forever at the final stage. Love the little additions at the end; it sets it up so nicely for that last bit of dialogue.

you gonna put it up on AO3 or only dw?

[joyfulseeker]

Yay! You are the greatest! Oh man, thank god no one ever needs to know how you saved us all from massive walls o text. It was pretty easy to be decisive because all the changes were so immediately obviously an improvement. Except for the eggs. :) because I have OPINIONS about eggs over easy.

The top link is an AO3 link, the bottom is on DW. I couldn't figure out how to get the fancy image sharing link (WHYYYY IS THE DOCUMENTATION SO NON-EXISTANT AND/OR HARD TO FIND, WHYYYY) so I just used the default. So much swearing at the interface last night. So much. I never did figure out how to impliment em-dash, or how to reference other AO3 users with icons.

[hammerhead22]

*flails*

How can I read this story announcement 8 minutes before I have to leave for work and expect to have a productive day? How? I can't, that's how. Want. To. Read. NOW.

[joyfulseeker]

Ahahaha, oh man, I've been there! I'm sorry! It'll still be here tonight, I promise!

[aileane47]

OOOooohh, I can never get enough of not-roomies-anymore fics, especially if they're this good. I loved how you wrote the unease between the two after Kane comes back from Switzerland, because it felt true, just this sense of them being a beat off (which can be maddening because there's not this one thing you can point at and say "this, this is what's weird!").

And the, ehem, resolution, is lovely. My favorite part there is when they're holding each other and talking, because not much has happened yet but you make it so erotic, their cheeks touching, and when Kaner licks his lips and catches Jonny's skin. So hot.

[joyfulseeker]

That pervasive sense of dis-ease is exactly what I was trying to get across, thank you so much for this comment! (to be honest, I could stand to read another dozen or so not-roommates-anymore fics also. And I'm still waiting to hear if any players stay rooming together even though they don't have to! I AWAIT THIS DAY.)

I'm glad that the talking and description worked for you in the sex scene at the end, because I'm always a fan of not-generic talking during sex scenes, so I wanted to try my hand at it!