Care to share the opening lines from your current WiP?

[jongibbs]

I'm having loads of fun writing Barnum's Revenge (the sequel to Fur-Face). Here's the (current ) opening paragraph:

Inside one of the metal garbage cans behind the Laughing Milkmaid pub, Snowy gripped the handle of the upturned lid above his head with both front paws.
    If he gets in here, I’m dog food.    Dense blackness closed in around

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[snapes_angel]

What's the limit? 2 paragraphs? >=}

[jongibbs]

Whatever you like :)

[snapes_angel]

Hm... I'll think about it... XD Because I actually do have something, although it will be revised or rewritten later. It's the same project that the title was for (now that I've finally determined the beginning of the story), and I'm going to be slowly working on a basic outline of it for NaNoWriMo. The poll, you know. So.....

[snapes_angel]

All right. I'll be back in a bit, too. This may seem a bit overlong, but it is a first draft: and trying to introduce the characters, setting, and situation with an economy of words, even at the beginning of a novel, well.....

[ex_naomi_ja]

Heck, why not! This is from Night Breed, the third Urban Wolf book:

It was seven-thirty on Friday night and I had a date with my girlfriend. Unluckily for me, she had a date with a mob of parents and school teachers, and I’d been banished to the bedroom to give Shannon and her prospective gang of clients some privacy. Not that “privacy” really meant much when you had werewolf hearing, but the mob hadn’t clicked onto that. So I had the bedroom door open just a crack, enough to let me hear most of what was going on in the living room. I probably should have felt bad about eavesdropping, but I’d been looking forward to our date all week and I was feeling just sulky enough to want some very petty revenge.

[jongibbs]

Not that “privacy” really meant much when you had werewolf hearing.

Good one :)

[msstacy13]

I’d been looking forward to our date all week and I was feeling just sulky enough to want some very petty revenge

If I may say so,
that's a really good example of how to speak volumes
in a single succinct statement.

[ex_naomi_ja]

Thank you!

[seekerval]

Here's the opening for my urban fantasy, working title "New Curiosity Shoppe

[jongibbs]

Interesting. I love that title, by the way :)

[seekerval]

Thanks, Jon.

I like the predicament you put Snowy in--how literal "I'll be dog meat" is.

[jongibbs]

Lol, if he let's go of the lid now, Barnum's Revenge will be a drabble :)

[black_faery]

Nice idea! And nice start to Barnum's Revenge, too :-)

Opening paragraph of my current WIP, Winter Of AshFaint morning sunlight had begun to burn through the misty clouds left by night when Torben Thorskil passed the pine-crested ridge that marked the eastern boundary of his family’s land and stopped. The sudden lurch in his stomach betrayed his true feelings on coming home and he wished he could be certain of the welcome he would receive. The line of trees swept down in a curve on the rocky outcrop to where the river flowed rough and furious over vast boulders. At the dying of the year, the waters swelled with rain on the mountains, creating a roaring brown torrent that churned to white as it tumbled through the rocks. Even from here, looking down, the sound of rushing water came to Torben as he checked his horse and looked out across the frozen land. Hard snow crunched beneath Greta’s hooves and the black mare whinnied, seeming to recognise where she was once more. Her breath came in a cloud of steam that hung, unmoving, in

[jongibbs]

Winter of Ash... Now, why does that title sound familiar? ;)

[black_faery]

Heh...no idea at all... ;-)

Since you ask; from _Brothers, Keepers, Losers, Weepers_

[msstacy13]

A homicide investigator sees some truly ugly things, and that’s an understatement. The two eye-witnesses willing to talk, an elderly white woman who had been eating a soft chicken taco and the black man who managed the fast-food franchise, agreed that the decedent, Ashlee Matthews, had spent the last few minutes of her life convulsing. This was confirmed by the three-minute cell phone video a bystander, who claimed not to have seen what happened, had taken. I watched that after getting their statements, and noticed that the two of them were the only people among the dozens present who made any attempt to intervene.

Re: Since you ask; from _Brothers, Keepers, Losers, Weepers_

[jongibbs]

I like that opening line :)

Re: Since you ask; from _Brothers, Keepers, Losers, Weepers_

[msstacy13]

Thank you.

Re: Since you ask; from _Brothers, Keepers, Losers, Weepers_

[seekerval]

Your opening sentence caught me. And the last one put a strong cap on the sad scene. Well done.