Comments | john556: The moment of Zen

john556

The moment of Zen

Oct 07, 2005 15:19

This is my sub plot. Won't go into the contest as it is fun but just a different story ( Read more... )

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Hello anonymous October 8 2005, 01:37:02 UTC

Thank you for using my name in your story!
It is short and funny! The story is a little all over the place, but I can see it is a work in progress.

My only criticism is please use spell checker?
Perservere and you will improve and find your own style!

May I suggest for ideas and story writing tips, to check out the Monster Island journal by ?....its in the ATZ homepage for Zombie Stories and books.
Its one of 3 in the authors series.There really great reads.

Thanks Zen :)

Re: Hello anonymous October 8 2005, 09:06:51 UTC

Back again!
Its Monster Island (online) novel by David Wellington.
at brokentype.com/monster/
You can try End Times (online) novel by Scarecrow.
at livejournal.com/users/scarecrowster/

These two guys have the best zombie journals in the world! (imo)

Scarecrow is a guy from australia and hes only 16!

Cheers Zen:)

Re: Hello john556 October 10 2005, 00:14:25 UTC

I'll check them out a little later.

linacrow October 8 2005, 02:36:17 UTC

Heh, moment of zen...reminds me of the Daily Show XD

john556 October 10 2005, 00:13:57 UTC

I was watching it!

anonymous October 12 2005, 19:42:31 UTC

Your piece needs some work. Spell checking would be nice. Also, you should try to vary your sentence structure a little bit. It gets a little monotonous with the He did this and He did that.