New Fic: He Tries To Speak (And Can't Begin To Say)

[joe_pike_junior]

Title: He Tries To Speak (And Can't Begin To Say)
Author: joe_pike_junior
Characters/pairings: House/Wilson friendship, House/Cuddy, mentions of House/Stacy. Members of the old and new teams make an appearance.
Warnings: Major character death, strong language and themes.

Summary: He tries to tell himself that this doesn't feel like atonement. House remembers

Comments

[blackmare]

OMG YOU BASTARDS! STOP KILLING WILSON!1!!L!!

This is really ... gah. Yeah, this is House, and how House would cope, or not cope. I read it yesterday and couldn't get my brain in gear to say anything, but it's an outstanding story and I think your present/past switching structure works really well. It's as if we're living in the present with House but also remembering with him, unable to get out of those moments of realization and horror and ultimate death.

[joe_pike_junior]

NO, DOCTOR WILSON, I EXPECT YOU TO DIE. *STROKES CAT*
That has more effect in person.

Oh, thank you. I really liked the idea of House talking to someone, but that had to be for a reason. And what better reason than the fact that he was feeling just a little bit unstable, that he couldn't get this out of his head? I kept thinking back to what we've seen in the past season as I wrote this.

I wanted to write House in real pain without going OTT, and I think that worked.

So, thanks. :)

[srsly_yes]

Found this devastating, very real, and very honest. Kudos.

[joe_pike_junior]

Thanks. That's something I like to hear, that you thought it honest. Do you mean that House is honest to himself, or that the writing is honest? Emotionally, perhaps?

I like my writing to be "unencumbered", although this doesn't trend particularly in that direction. There are parts of it I could have taken out, but didn't.

[blackmare]

I actually thought that this was a very spare story. No baggage in the tale, despite everything House is carrying. Whatever you left in rather than removing, I'm glad you left it there.

[srsly_yes]

Primarily, I felt the writing was honest, but that encompasses how you wrote House's feelings. His emotions felt genuine. Natural reactions to watching Wilson, someone he deeply cares about, deteriorate. You did not romanticize Wilson's symptoms either, but thankfully sprinkled them throughout the story with just the right amount of description. Any more would be too agonizing to read, but just enough to empathize with what House was going through.

As far as taking out anything, I feel it was just right. A serious subject about two friends dealing with a long, debilitating illness. That's what made it so good. You took the time to hit all the correct notes along the way.

[cindy_lou_who8]

:( *sobs*

[joe_pike_junior]

Um... There there. *passes you a tissue*

[photoash]

I like how you handled this. I think that House would be able to help Wilson in this way :/ but with House's criminal involvement in the past it'd be interesting to see how it gets handled or if PPTH can cover it up well enough.

[spotandpunk]

Ooooh, nicely done. I think I may have fallen in love with your writing style today. Fantastic work, well, well done!