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The Way of Things, Chapter 28

Oct 25, 2007 08:10

He’s come home directly from the scene, retreating to the kitchen to think things over as well as clean up the mess he’d made earlier the previous evening. His mind is chasing in circles as he washes and dries things, putting the plates and silverware away, as he cleans up the evidence of his anger in the parlour. The self-recrimination he feels ( Read more... )

the way of things, kendal, rose, blackpool, carlisle, year 1, poor peter, post-dd, smut

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gritsinmisery October 25 2007, 12:28:19 UTC

OMG, it's the next installment -- 'scuse me while I go brew a cuppa. BRB

lady_adams October 25 2007, 12:37:27 UTC

*utter speechlessness* I--I--I....uh..g-g-GAH! HOW COULD YOU DO THAT TO PETER!!?!?! (AND US?!?!)

GAH!

*must leave for class, which is probably a good thing, given her temporary inability to speak coherently*

jlrpuck October 25 2007, 15:41:02 UTC

HOW COULD YOU DO THAT TO PETER!!?!?!

*sigh* Poor Peter. This, I promise you, will be about as low as it gets for him. Well, this chapter and next. But mainly this chapter.

And he'll be rewarded! Honest!

brilliantomega October 25 2007, 16:10:47 UTC

Holding you to that.

lady_adams October 26 2007, 13:04:07 UTC

Seconded!

(Your icon is seriously creeping me out. I don't know why, it just is...)

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jlrpuck October 25 2007, 15:42:07 UTC

What a cruel, cruel thing to do to the poor man.

It was the only way to work some smut in, and still maintain the story! So...yeah. Peter's going to have a bad morning. But at least I didn't have him kidnapped or imprisoned or anything. Right?

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gritsinmisery October 25 2007, 12:39:44 UTC

Aw, poor mite. 'S not fair, really.

jlrpuck October 25 2007, 15:42:48 UTC

'S not fair, really.

No, it's really not. But...the universe will reward him for his suffering.

jvgymnast October 25 2007, 12:40:45 UTC

I have to say, at the very start, I did seriously wonder if it was a dream. The first thing that tipped me off was the change in tense, but also, it just seemed to come out of left field in terms of the story. It makes plenty of sense as a dream, though.
Sorry I'm so skimpy on the comments at the mo-- must leave for work.

jlrpuck October 25 2007, 15:44:33 UTC

The first thing that tipped me off was the change in tense,

Yeah, that's a pretty dead giveaway. I started writing this chapter, as I do all my others, in past tense. But somewhere around the sofa, without even consciously doing it, I flipped over to present tense. And it stuck. Very weird--and it made it almost impossible to write the final two paragraphs in past tense again.

Sorry I'm so skimpy on the comments at the mo-- must leave for work.

I hope things have improved at the job!

jvgymnast October 25 2007, 16:20:49 UTC

I much prefer to read past tense-- I'm not sure why-- maybe becase it seems to be the norm in most books and articles?
And the work... well, I'm here right now. It's gotten somewhat better but still not entirely comfortable. I'll probably post about it some more next week. Also, I'll try and get some more specific comments together, but I don't dare read that chapter at work ;0)