DW Fic: A Grand Adventure [Charley Pollard/River Song | PG]

[jinxed_wood]

Title: A Grand Adventure
Rating PG
Characters: River Song/Charley Pollard, the Doctor.
Fandom: Doctor Who
Summary: In which an Edwardian adventuress literally bumps into a time travelling archaeologist in the midst of liberating a tablet from an ancient burial site......

Written for kowarth, I'm so sorry about the lateness. I'm an idiot who obviously can

Comments

[persiflage_1]

Oh that was fun - if a little sad towards the end...

And, as usual, I'm going to go all beta on your prose:

They had crept into ever crevice of her mind

every not ever

The went down in a tangle of limbs reminiscent of an cliched scene from an nineties romcom

They not The; a not an (both times!)

She was a short and curvy, and wrapped up in in tweed and pearls.

Either take out the "a" or put something after "curvy"; you've got "in" twice

“I don’t suppose you could direct me to the exit?”

You don't need the speech marks before 'I'

singapore slings

Should have Cap S on both those because it's a name (esp the first!)

“Lets go!”

Let's not Lets since it's an abbreviated form of "Let us"

“Let me give you a refresher course,” suggested.

she before suggested

but it more than enough to decipher the Gallifreyan symbols.

was before more

she wasn't surprisedy

surprised

Unsurprising, it didn’t break

Unsurprisingly

[jinxed_wood]

Thank you for the corrections! I'm useless at spotting them :-)

As for the ending, yes, I went all sad there towards the finish. I've always found River's life kind of tragic and I couldn't help but reflect that in the story - but I did put a dash of hope in at the end. In Who, there should always be hope...

[persiflage_1]

In Who, there should always be hope...

And in life...

[kowarth]

I loved that! Both woman lost thanks to the Doctor's ingrained habit of running away.

I'm sorry I didn't get to it sooner, but I'm So glad I got to it now