Ratings and stuff!

[jinxed_wood]

So I put up a lower rated version of On Appian Way (HL) up on ff.net. Still not gen, but I cut the bedroom scene to a kiss and then used my trusty elipses. I can't help but feel my original gut instinct was right, though. The story reads better with the full scene in it! Ah well, I dropped some breadcrumbs for the readers there, if they want to

Comments

[lferion]

I agree that the story feels more complete with the whole scene -- there is some nice character stuff in the way they interact there.

[jinxed_wood]

I have to agree with you!

Can I take a stab at an Edit?

[innogen]

I think that I could go through the scene and edit it according to FF.Net rules so that everything remains with parameters, if you like. I read both versions, and the scene needs to remain in the story - the FF.net version feels as if the reader missed a vital cue, and is left reeling, going...huh? What'd I miss? Plus, the sex is really hot!

~Inny