Fic: Some Truths Hurt (V/Logan, all) R [20 of ?] part 5

[jenwin23]

Title: Some Truths Hurt
Author: jenwin23
Pairing/Character: all, LoVe
Word Count: 19,756
Rating: R
Spoilers: Season 1

Warnings: Slight violence, cussing, discussions about rape and possible incest.

Disclaimer: I don't own Veronica Mars or any of the characters, but I promise to take good care of them while I borrow them!

Comments

[celtic_flicka]

I really liked the "pretend" conversation between Logan and Veronica in the lobby of the rehab center--it starts out as an act, but we all know that what they were saying about his drinking is pretty much the truth.

I'm also liking kickass Grandma Lester more, and I hope we get to see her again!

[jenwin23]

That interaction would have been OOC for Veronica, a bit anyway. I liked that Veronica daydreamed about kissing Logan and him holding her, and he dreamed about quick hot sex. Or almost.

Grandma Lester will be back, but I'm not sure in how large a role.

[jenwin23]

I replied to the wrong comment before....for this comment: Yeah this conversation (Logan is an alcoholic) is a bit of foreshadowing for later in the story. Even though I realize I haven't made Logan drink all that much in this story, I imply it here and there.

[celtic_flicka]

I think it's strongly implied in canon that Logan is an alcoholic, or at least well on his way there, but it's never really addressed much--so I like that you're going to go into that.

[mitzy_spain]

I like the way your story change from funny parts (Dick, I always laugh with him)to emocional parts with Logan and Veronica, she is really good helping him.
And the last part Veronica giving herself to Logan it was special... but now something is in Veronica´s mind...

[jenwin23]

At first I just addded in the humor after the tense parts naturally, then I startted to try to add it. I think that's pretty common for TV shows--dark then humor.

Veronica's thought process will be revealed pretty early in the next chapter, and it's not good for Logan.

[alee23]

I remember how much this chapter killed me when I read it on FF! You have such a way with words that has these scenes coming off the page and being real! Especially the "confrontation" at the rehab centre and then just all the emotions expressed when they sleep together.

I've alson loved the detail you've taken into expressing how much of a toll it's taken on Veronica in regards to the emotional ping pong with Logan. The scene where she's sleeping in the car and Logan noticing the rings under her eyes - I don't know how to express it but just the way you've described it really stuck out in mind for that scene.

[ajzkitten69]

Sexy times were sexy. Like, seriously. And I'm very curious to know what was up with Veronica. I'm so glad to see that Lynn's alive. And I loved the truckers. Looking forward to more.

[jenwin23]

I'm glad the sexin was sexy. Unsexy would be bad. Veronica has her reasons and I think they make sense for someone who has already lost so much and has regrets.

I made the Lynn story more of a roller coster than the show, but in the end I went with a happy(ier) ending.

I loved the scene at Denny's. The line "he needs a table, a big one, lots of space" in my mind sounds a lot like the line in 10 things I hate about you where Kat says "Bianca's out with truckers. Big ones. Full of sperm." That cadence stuck in my head and that's how I hear that line.

[jenwin23]

Glad that you found me, I have more chapter written I'll post agian this week. Maybe tomorrow. I know what you mean about productivity, I killed an entiere day reworking the timeline and researching stuff for the story last week. :(

Thanks for reviewing.