Remix of crazyfaucet

[jentremix_mod]

Title: Sunshine After the Rain (the floats-like-a-feather remix)
Rating:PG-13
Group/Pairing: Koyama/Yamashita
Warnings: non-linear timeline, illegal human ownership, implied past suicide attempt
Notes: Thanks to crazyfaucet for giving me an interesting jumping-off point. Thank you to those who listened to me whine about this and, of course, to my wonderful

Comments

[crazyfaucet]

SPOT! -reads now!-

[crazyfaucet]

First of all, thank you very very much! As I read the original, I noticed some horribly minor mistakes with grammar so I thank you for putting up with it!

I am completely blown away by this remix! The reverse-chronological order, the words you used to relay the story, even the use of the little suns and rain clouds as markers it was all so spectacular!

Once I hit paragraph too, you really gave me a scare. I was thoroughly disturbed and creeped out by what was ensuing but obviously I didn't give up. It was a delightful chill really! Definitely not what I had in mind as I developed Yamashita's reasoning towards being so thin, but yours is much better and more complex. You're whole story is more beautiful and complex then mine ever will =)

Before too long he had become the forgotten toy, shoved aside for the shiny new plaything, and he spent days and days in front of the mirror refusing food and thinking on perfection. this was my favourite line in the whole piece! It reminds me so much of the song Toy Boy by Mika (which is I was

[sanjihan]

Thank you for giving me something interesting to work with. I wasn't quite sure how to go about it, but you left it open for a lot of different interpretations and I took advantage of it. XD

I hadn't heard the song, but I listened to it after you mentioned it, and I can see the similarity!

Thank you. :)

[carmine_pink]

So good and so sad, the way the two of them were broken like that. The 'modification' part was eerily painful -- some strong imagery there. The first time I read this was on my phone and I didn't notice the little sun and rain icons; now seeing them, they provide really nice transition points. I'm glad Koyama and Pi found each other. <3 Thank you!

[sanjihan]

I'm ... sort of glad it was painful, I guess. Mission accomplished? lol. Thank you. <3

[maayacola]

T_T

*tequila shots*

Very well done. Thank you.

[sanjihan]

Thank you. <3