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Flamingos Found: Teachers Write Week 2

Jul 13, 2015 08:03

Hello Teachers and welcome to Week 2 of Teachers Write ( Read more... )

teachers write, monday morning warm-up

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He's young he's horny and he loved the sound of his own voice ext_2665811 July 13 2015, 13:46:56 UTC

Good morning, Jo ( ... )

Re: He's young he's horny and he loved the sound of his own voice ext_708352 July 13 2015, 16:27:43 UTC

What fun! I love the humour. It feels real and gives the reader a secret glimpse into this young man's character and the family dynamic. Great stuff!

Re: He's young he's horny and he loved the sound of his own voice ext_2035915 July 13 2015, 22:43:13 UTC

I love this! Great job depicting this scene. Nice sense of humor.

Re: He's young he's horny and he loved the sound of his own voice jbknowles July 13 2015, 23:06:53 UTC

Ha! That's great! Thanks for sharing! :)

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Thanks for the Monday Morning Inspiration! anonymous July 13 2015, 14:15:18 UTC

I looked around this new ghost own with a mixture of wonder and awe. Oh, the stories this place could tell. I could feel it in my bones. This was a place I was meant to find. Was it permanent? Probably not. Was it a place to call home temporarily. Absolutely ( ... )

Re: Thanks for the Monday Morning Inspiration! ext_2035915 July 13 2015, 22:54:59 UTC

Oh, I like this. I want to know more about this kid and why he's on the road.

Re: Thanks for the Monday Morning Inspiration! ext_3226335 July 14 2015, 00:58:25 UTC

Love this setting, and the time you took to describe it. Then how you make us curious with a glimpse of your character, and already made me sad for them. Great images!

If anyone has a bear skin rug . . . ext_708352 July 13 2015, 16:21:43 UTC

Wow! This really helped me to change the direction of the scene I was working on in such an interesting way. I used the line (see subject) as is in the middle of the piece. This really showed me how you can introduce something wild and out of the blue to interrupt the tension ( ... )

Re: If anyone has a bear skin rug . . . ext_2035915 July 13 2015, 22:52:27 UTC

Nicely done! I like the way you explore the characters' backstory.

Re: If anyone has a bear skin rug . . . jbknowles July 13 2015, 23:45:15 UTC

OH my gosh this is fantastic!!!!! I love how it helped develop backstory/character. Well done!

Re: If anyone has a bear skin rug . . . ext_3226335 July 14 2015, 01:00:26 UTC

Nicely done! So creative and thoughtful the way you used this in your piece!

If anyone has a bear skin rug... ext_2035972 July 13 2015, 19:51:08 UTC

“If anyone has a bear skin rug preferably with the bear's head - let me know,” the ad said. Yeah, I knew where there was one, and finally, after 12 years, I knew the story behind it. You got to know that my uncles and every other male in my extended family have killing in their blood. Deer were their choice of prey, evident by the six deer head that hung in the Vermont room of Grandma and Grandpa’s house (there’d be more if there was more room, I’m sure). But as far as I knew there was only one bear skin rug, head and all, and that was at Uncle Raymond and Auntie Donna’s house ( ... )

Re: If anyone has a bear skin rug... ext_2035915 July 13 2015, 22:51:28 UTC

Very creative way to incorporate this line. Nice!

Re: If anyone has a bear skin rug... jbknowles July 13 2015, 23:48:28 UTC

How wonderful! I love it!

Two Guys And A Truck ext_3216646 July 13 2015, 20:36:50 UTC

Wow! This was a really powerful exercise for me. I posted a couple of entries last week based on my WIP, which is still very much in the pre-natal stage. So, this is a VOICE from the story ( ... )

Re: Two Guys And A Truck ext_2035915 July 13 2015, 22:47:22 UTC

Wow. I could sense the impending bad outcome from your first lines. Nicely done!

Re: Two Guys And A Truck jbknowles July 13 2015, 23:50:20 UTC

Great job! Definitely found the voice!!

Re: Two Guys And A Truck ext_3216646 July 14 2015, 00:36:14 UTC

Thanks, Jo! I've been searching for a way to develop this character. Your exercise helped me bring him to life!

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